All Comments on 'Heal Me Pt. 01'

I really liked it so far. I'd suggest to make the chapters longer though. This was very short. I hope you update soon. Also, why don't you find an editor? That will certainly help you with the mistakes.

The aversion to pain is directly related to the amount of pain experienced. Just as they say that "nothing tastes better than thin feels", it is easy to believe that no amount of sex could overshadow it anesthetize the soul shattering pain of a love's betrayal.

Love to hear more

Hmmm kinda wish David had went to the wedding and when asked if he was there for the bride or groom, he'd reply,"oh I'm HIS ex!" What an insensitive jerk to just leave him, and not just because it was a woman.

Anyway, I can't wait to read how David and Josh meet and their feelings towards each other. I like that both men are telling each of their stories. Looking forward to more from you (:

My interest in piqued. This was a good set up. I hope the second chapter is longer

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Your command of English is stronger than many native writers. Do not overly worry about errors. There were very few and they didn't distract from strong story telling. I look forward to more from you.

I would have liked to see the two men cross paths in the first chapter. What does David do for a living?

Hopefully the story you build upon it will be equally strong. Go slow with their relationship as one is eager to find love, and the other gun shy. I would suggest a courtship, romance, a gentle start to love from which will stem a healthy relationship,sex life included.

I am enjoying the premise of your story. It's kind of like a 101 Dalmatians when the two dog owners meet except the owners are gay....

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