All Comments on 'Heartbreak under the Neon Light'

But I gotta say, after page 2 it was a little too much confused. Pieces of story and dialogues jammed up together without much sense. I'd say you need to straighten out each chapter plot because otherwise it becomes hard to follow it.

Great start I hope you continue this story as is.

Great story! Need to continue, cause I wanna know who the shadow is?

Hi! When is the next chapter coming? I can't wait....

4 pages with no sex and i still read every word.

Thank you for a well written story. Carnt wait for more

Don't you dare stop now.

Please post a second chapter to this story. Soon! Thank you for sharing it with us!

Please finish this story. You can't leave us hanging like this. We need to know if Jenna and Lauren get together. I know I hope they do.

Great introduction and buildup to what promises to be a most interesting story.

Oh most definitely continue please.

CHAPTER 2! PLEEEEEEEEEAAAASSSSEEE!!!!!!

...This can be a great story. Take your time, read, and re-read. Edit. Also, please watch out for the character names. At times, the wrong character's name was attached to the dialogue. Overall, though, I'm anxiously waiting for the next chapter.

Stormy, I love your writing style, you're one of the best here on literotica. I know you are having troubles with your job but can I beg you please to keep writing and to at least finish this tale........ and Rags........ and of course Girls of Manchester! I know that's all of them but what can I say, your stories are too good to just leave them hanging!

Love Gertie

Give us more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Soooooo looking forward to next chapter! Awesome writing.

I loved this story. You conjured a very atmospheric tale, heartache mixed with sadness.

Yet ended with a faint dusting of hope.

I do hope there is more to follow.

Saw this in random stories section Aug 18.

Very disappointed that there so far have not been further chapters.

Pleeeeease.

Your story seems to get timing a little confused, and it jumped off in a totally new direction when Molly was introduced. Still, it's interesting and I'd like to see it continue.

Lauren's revelation was not totally unexpected, but I'd really like to see how she got from smelling Jenna to realizing she loved her. I'd also like to know where this will go.

And, who is that in the next booth?

You've left a lot of loose ends dangling. PLEASE continue.

The risk you run on this site is finding a story you really like and then finding that the author never finished it. Fair enough , writing is in their time. But after three years, it looks like this is a dead end. I gave this four stars some time ago and now find my self re-reading it by mistake. Really likeable characters; a bit of character building here that looked promising - but in the end I wish there was a way to mark these stories as 'unfinished' or 'draft' on this site so that readers are forewarned... Id also like to rework my star rating

Well the good thing is it's so well written it isn't too difficult for a good imagination to finish. Would happily read more though.