All Comments on 'Heather's Moon Cycle'

Gwydion? Really? Is this a pathetic attempt at humor? "jiggly saddlebags of female flesh?" Is this supposed to be erotic? Just awful.

Everyone has their own fetish, their own kink. I don't care what turns you on but keep it appropriate.

Please continue. Don't listen to them

What I understood from this part is that it has no LW in it!!! A single man and a divorced woman with two daughters...If she was a witch or not it doesn't matter...1* for being in the wrong category...

This is an example of a story loaded with verbose diction with no story to tell. I don't know what category it belongs in, but don't waste people's time by putting it in the 'LW' category. 1 well deserved *.

Since this seems to be your first submission, I think that you deserve to be shown a bit of mercy. Not that the other commenters are wrong; they raise valid objections to your story. It certainly is in the wrong category…if one considers what you have already written. Your tale is a bit short and contains no overt sex. That, in and of itself, does not constitute fatal error. However, going forward, you may want to consider 2-3 pages which contain interludes of erotic activity. Barring this, it never hurts to preface your work with a brief description of what the reader can expect, allowing them to choose whether or not to read on.

Be careful of using too much flowery prose, or as another commenter noted, being verbose without having too much to say. Make sure you are remaining consistent in your language usage. Popping in "brainy" words randomly tends to make the writer look pretentious or superior. Talk to us…not down to us!

Finally, don't give up. Take your critics in stride. This is a tough audience to play to!

Not sure where you're going with this one. From what I've seen so far it could easily be put in non-erotic, but to please readers in any category you need either sexual activity or a REALLY good narrative hook. You might want to study other stories posted on your favorite category AND carefully consider the advice offered in the constructive criticism comments, especially RapidResponder.

You are going to get really low ratings in LW, when this story would be a hit in a more appropriate category. Is this a mistake?

The story itself is adequately written, but not very interesting, unless you are into witch stuff. Witch I'm not. No rating given at this time.

Way too short to be considered a story. Barely an opening paragraph. There might be a story line here but you have done such a bad job in the presentation that it's lost. Try again. Get help.

I have been reading Literotica for quite a while and don't recall "queening stools" in a story. I like where this is going. Use BDSM or Fetish for a category or I might miss it.

Yeah, but all means ignore anyone who dares to have a different opinion from this bozo.

If this was directed at me, you qualify as an ignorant troll. There are a variety of opinions here and I try to offer support a writer if I see potential. So, shove it.

"Ignore Naysayers" should be ignored. Talk about being a troll. The whiners who attack others, in my opinion, are the trolls. Everybody should have the same rights to voice an opinion as they see fit. Seems like the readers on this site don't understand that. Giving the low score this story received, I didn't bother reading it. I check the comments to see why the low score and can't help but read some of the bullshit that's always coming from the readers. Grow up, not everybody shares your personal preference in erotica.

Absolutely captivating thus far 5 stars just on characters alone!

There is garbage, and then there is this. Not even good enough for garbage.