All Comments on 'Hellie's Breeding'

I mean it's really hot, but if you're going to write a breeding story why would Hellie be on her period? I mean I know technically there is a slim chance you can get pregnant on your period , but that's vanishingly unlikely. Its just weird that the shopkeeper was so adamant about knocking her up whilst she was on her period. And I'm sure there's people into periods and you do you, but this story doesn't seem to appeal to them either because there isn't enough blood. Or any really. Could have done something with red blood and cum making a pink color as it comes out of her. Trust me if I was having sex on a shop counter during my period the counter would have a teaspoon or two worth of blood and it would be smeared everywhere. I think it would have been hotter if you had her needing to buy condoms, but she didn't have money and then. the story continued as written. Because it really was hot except for the period bit

If she is on her period and in need of tampons there will be blood everywhere. It doesn't just conveniently disappear when a dick turns up.

So in the original draft of the story blood is mentioned numerous times, but I wasn't sure how readers would react if I continually brought it up. If period sex is something folks are interested in seeing more in a story, I am all for it! Please let me know <3 (Also, rest assured I know how reproduction works, the point was that Chip does not :'D)

She's not fertile when she's bleeding and having her period. That's when the egg is wasted and discharged in the bloody fluid.

Two weeks after she bleeds, she is 100x more likely to be in heat.

This story just is word salad, all tossed up.

Well person below me, if you read closely, you'll see that the author acknowledges that reproduction doesn't work that way, when she has Haley 'not mention' that it doesn't work that way. I rather enjoyed the story myself, but then again, I've been known to enjoy salad with the right dressing.

Love this. I enjoy the thought that the shop owner and his friend aren't getting her pregnant (even if they think they are) because she's on her period, and is saving her ovulation for Bryant. Wonderfully written, and ignore the "bUt tHaT's nOt hOw iT wOrKs" folks. They're not complaining about no lube/no cleanup anal, they're complaining just to complain