All Comments on 'Helping Out Your Friend's Girl'

Very rude but what a tale. Poor Keith cuckold 'ed at the age of 20' something. It would have to be a regular Saturday night fixture after the game. Ask Macenzie see what she thinks. You've not said much about what sort of people they are a bit of padding won't hurt and may help the reader to identify with the characters involved. I think the closer you get involved emotionally can only improve the satisfaction one derives from reading the story.