All Comments on 'Her First Time Being in Control'

Good premise.

But, sadly, rushed.

This is all the foreplay/preliminaries: "Once she was on top of me..." That's it?

Needs much more interaction. Needs much more dialog during the sex. Needs her giving him orders/directions about what she wants him to do. And how to do it better.

Needs her teasing him, but not letting him cum -- only her pleasure is important, etc.

Three stars.

Excellent...inspired me to figure out how to repeat with my wife.

This will score high, I really liked it. The only problem is, it will not get a big volume of readers which is a shame because it is good.

It needed a bit more dialogue and it was a touch rushed at the start where he immediately told her he needed someone in charge. But a nice story, well told.