by ShadowsBelladonna
The last line is meant to be a lead into chapter two. I just havent been able to finish it and post it.
HIGH EYE ENJOYED YOUR STORY, EYE AGREE THAT IT WAS TWO SHORT, BUTT IT IS ENTERTAINING, & THAT IS WHAT YOU WERE STRIVING FOUR.. SEW EWE ACCOMPLISHED WHAT EWE SET OUT TWO DEW..NOW FORE HER CLOTHING..CENTS DADDY HAS TOO HIT & RAPE , HER CHOICE OF ANY TANK WOOD BEE A DETERRENT REGARDING DADDIES ACTIONS..(-: EYE AGREE, EWE KNEED TWO ADD ANOTHER CHAPTER TOO THIS HEAR STORY, PLEASE..JO.B.T.W. I HOPE YOU ENJOYED THE COMMENTS AS MUCH AS I LIKED DREAMING IT UP (-: JO
English would have been nice, instead of Californian, I'm still trying to get my head around someone wearing a Tank, what sort A1M1 Abrams Panzer, maybe a hot water tank? no too much slang too much unsaid too many details not covered and far far far too short.
Over all I enjoyed you story. Although I could have done without all the hitting, but thats only my opinion. I hope you plan to follow up with chapter 2, because there was was more to like than dislike.