All Comments on 'Hey Gramps'

Great story! One wonders how Gramps is so well connected...will there be more from Gramps an the Fam?

This was a story, not just sex in the family. Gramps is a true leader of his family, his role will be hard to beat. There are some typos, but that didn't distract from the story. Please add more to this or come up with another.

Great Story. Will be looking for more about Gramps!

Please get an editor. You dropped words, missed contractions that changed the meaning of the sentence.

Your storytelling is very interesting. With a storyline like this, you should break it into chapters. You could then take more careful development of the characters and plot.

I found the story to be good. My problem, I was having trouble following who was who and found myself backing up several times. I also never figured out (no lead in) as to who Grandpa really was and were he got his power from and I questioned if that was really a needed part of the story. As noted, an editor would help as well as breaking it into chapters.

Don't give up, I can see possibilities :)

What you have here is an excellent outline. I agree totally with a search for an editor, there are many helpful ones in Literotica. Part of the difficulty is the process of role-change vis granddaughter to daughter and connecting the 'before' ID to the 'after'. Still, it will be worth the work, I think.

I do enjoy the rollicking pace, chaos is a little scary, but we're all here to 'suspend disbelief'. I'm giving you 3*s, but will revisit.