All Comments on 'High School Again? Ugh! Ch. 03'

Having John keep running away from the truth of his existence is getting old and repetitive... time for him to move forward finally.

Fantastic addition to the story. I love how realistic the whole scenario. I hope you make it a little less depressing. I liked that he could save his father from a heart attack, etc. Don't wreck that by making the universe explode if he changes his life for the better.

So far John has been his own worst enemy. Trying to blame Rodger, if it wasn't for his disdain and dismissal of Tyche he wouldn't be where he is. A typical whining, arrogant,narrow-minded, selfish prick who won't accept responsibility for his own actions.

Great story. Interesting turn of events. Wouldn't have guessed where this is now headed! Looking forward to the next chapter....

I loved this last chapter. This is my first time reading a time travel story where the main character was sent back when he didn't want to go. And this chapter just illustrates how most people would feel when they find their last anchor to their old life is snatched away from them.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Really dug this chapter, and am loving this whole series. Was wondering when John would tag the gym teacher. Really only one woman left now... anyway, keep up the good work, Joe.

I really liked this chapter. Kinda threw another wrench in the works. It's keeping me guessing. I like that. Keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next chapter!

I think this makes a decent ending. I think I would have liked it better, and that it would have made more sense if he had just gone back downstairs, but given the ending, there is no need to know more.

Well done. I hope you continue the story, there is a lot left to be said. Thanks for your hard work.

More please, have to flesh out the Tara relationship and the guy who kept him from being caught skipping out from the vice princeple. Also a common trope is the time traveller makes a fortune. Lets see him make it and change his sisters life and rodgers sister. Love the greek goddess meme (ha-ha)

This is the first time I've left a public comment on a story. I am finding myself wanting more. I usually skip stories that are several chapters long, but since this had to do with time travel and I'm some what of a sci fi person I'd thought I would give this a shot. And I'm glad I did. This is a great series and will be sad to see it eventually end, but so far this is great. Few twists and turnd you don't see coming...just wonderful. Keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next chapter.

time travel stories here. <p>

If you are able to maintain this balance of both light hearted and serious reflection --- whether in sex with the hot gym teacher or Mrs. Robinson next ddoor.... or in the reflection on family and personal relationships and responsibilities --- in a likeable, readable manner, you'd have written one of the best Lit stories. <p>

The one pitfall that most writers fall into is to go too far.... to vest (invest) too much of their stories in the hands of mythological gods and goddesses. <p>

The Greek gods and goddesses should merely be small, imaginary devices YOU THE AUTHOR use, to tell the story of your hero/character: those mythological characters should NOT then become dictators of your hero's destiny. when you do that, the story becomes formulaic and cliche. <p>

I think letting the hero/character NOT knowing for sure how or why he's been transported back in time --- for what purpose, if there's one or many; why?, etc --- allow him to be as unsure as he was in his "other life," which means that THIS CURRENT TIME TRAVELED LIFE is his real life, and he will have to chart his own destiny, like he did it before, with no more certainty than that what decisions we make NOW can influence the outcomes of our lives LATER, no matter where we are, who we are, what era we live in... <p>

And most of the great stories ever written are stories about small details, reflections, relationships, hopes, and dreams.... NOT stories about conquering the universe, have endless sexual partners, possessing the most powerful weapons or knowledge, being able to read minds and kill all over doers, etc., ad nauseam... <p>

In other words: <p>

Keep the story simple, lighthearted but also serious at the same time. keep it as a personal travel, a personal reflection on life and living, about sorrow and bittersweetness, on the one hand, as well as triumph and a sense of simple family joy where everyone gets to gether to eat a simple meal and laugh at each other's hectic days and promise one another to support them better the next time, etc. <p>

Why "shoot for the stars" when the stars are us, when we are truly stardusts? For, as Walt Whitman eloquently put: <p>

A blade of grass --- or the flight of a dandelion in a beautiful sunny, wiffy afternoon --- is no less than the journey work of the stars...

If your character's youth was before AIDS, there wouldn't be CDs or CD players. Other than that, mostly good. Make sure you're using the write words (mistake intended as example).

I loved and hated this story so much. Never have I felt such a deep connection to any characters from any stories I've read on this site, but you've done it. Never have I felt like crying, have my eyes teared up, from a story on here, but this is simply the most touching and amazing one I've come across. I do hope there are more chapters to come. Thank you for writing something so amazing.

John's friend Rodger is a bit close to home for me. I was not told until I was an adult and both parents were dead that my father had violently raped my sister when she was only 12 or 13. The information was from a different sister who was very religious and truthful, so I believe her. If I had a way to do it, I probably would do the same as Rodger and go back in time and kill my father before the rape happened.

I enjoy the thoughtful way you are addressing the changes good and bad that would probably occur if someone could live their life again. I know John needs to get away for a while to try to deal with his "split" personality (young body, old mind) but I hope he remembers his promise to his younger sister that he'll always be there for her. Leaving home when she is only 13 doesn't feel like he's being there for her. He would have been leaving for college within another year, anyway - but he needs to find some way to keep in touch with his family, especially his sister.

I suspect John will use gambling on sports events, stock market, etc. to provide money to live on. His life will be very different if he doesn't finish high school or college.

Although I feel you write your sex scenes well, I'm most interested in John's "journey" in this new/old life. I would appreciate a mention soon about just how old John was at the start of the story when he was sent back to high school. I'm guessing 45 but he could have been a bit older.

The "living one's life over again" theme reminds me of one of my fave books of that theme. It is "Replay" - a 1986 book by Ken Grimwood. If you haven't read it, you might give it a try. It addresses some of the changes in life when "reliving" and how some things just don't work out.

I find myself wishing there was a 'notify of updates' feature, as I missed this chapter at first.

It's not my usual fantastical fare, but I can't wait to hear what happens to John next, especially who he meets next.

Its been over a month since the last chapter. I love your writing, story lines and charecter development. Please do not keep your loyal fans waiting so long between submissions!

you are spending to much time with his introspective bullshit. What's with his fascination to return to some previous life where he was unhappy. Shit, if he has feelings for Tara he should just go with it, worrying about some gods setting him up and not wanting to follow the plans, you've just lost the story. Shit, it sounds like his past life sucked, here's his chance to improve it, yet you have the guy triple thinking everything and wanting to return to his previous existance where he was an unhappy looser. Lighten up the story and it'll be much better.

I love your stories, but please do not let us waiting too long for the next chapter.

This has to be the most fascinating storyline I've read on this site.

Tom's Noisy girlfriend & John Billionaire have been my favourites but this story is giving them competition.

But the wait for the next chapters is excruciating. I check your submissions page daily. It's been over a month since this chapter. Plz hurry... Your fans are waiting..

I check for the next chapter every day.

I know you will tell us the rest of the story. I'm looking forward to seeing how you will eventually conclude it. Thanks for what you do. This is one of your best!

what the hell, after a great start just kept losing interest. i mean whats with all those doubts and changing past. i thought the guy will have fun and will lead to a better life, but you just killed his friend(again what the hell) and now he's running away instead of going for the good girl. anyway what can i say its your story, enjoy, for my part i'm not gonna read it. but have to admit amazing concept and great start, could have left the friend alive but hey i'm just another dumb reader. but keep it up some people do like your story. wish you luck.

Actually, I think this is a great story

This is a fascinating story line. I hope you can continue it. Very different and thats what makes it so good. Well done.

It's been quite some time I felt so touched by a story. Thank you!

I loved the story line a whollllle lot. Just one question though, have you read the

incarnations of immortality by piers anthony

This is an amazing story and it is incredibly touching. Keep up the good work

Great story (so far). Good feel for dialog but dude, you seriously need more grammar training and a good proofreader.

If it was before AIDS nobody would have a CD player.

AIDS wasn't something people worried about until 87, there were relatively few cases before then.

By that time there were millions of CD players in circulation.

So he's not really wrong. Too close for you to make a big deal about it.

Besides, you shouldn't be putting corrections in the comments section. Rude.

i'll have a damn good night dreaming about johnny simmons and patrick sterling (from the 'a stitch in time' series), and me as the filling in a BIG MEATY sandwich....

oh jd, please finish your story :D

When I see jealous people start criticizing the story negatively about anachronism, grammar or plot holes, it means the story is damn good. Thanks Joe, great story, please finish it.

alot of changes in the course of this chapter. first Rodger then his teacher and coach, then he takes off for nowhere in particular. gets a visit from nemisis and is told he cant go back that vacation is permanent.

Truly an amazing story. Very well-written, well-thought out. I can't put it down, metaphorically. Great work!

I am NOT a grammarian. If literature and spelling had not been incorporated with grammar in high school, I might not have passed English. I read prodigiously though.

I guess it was reading so much, especially reading good writers that has caused my abhorrence for poor usage of our language. Bad spelling and poor usage of certain words just leap out of the page to me.

This occurs mostly when reading writings of others. I simply don’t seem capable of catching the many errors in my own writings. So, with that caveat, here are a few of my “Pet Peeves”:

1. conscious and conscience are not interchangeable.

2. you’re and your are different words with different meanings.

3. they’re, their and there are also different words with different meanings.

4. pass, passed and past are also different words with different meanings.

5. then and than are also different words with different meanings.

6. cloths and clothes are also different words with different meanings.

7. to, too and two are also different words with different meanings.

8. quit, quiet and quite are also different words with different meanings.

9. brassiere and brazier are also different words with different meanings.

10. bear and bare are also different words with different meanings.

11. bier and beer are also different words with different meanings.

12. accept and except are also different words with different meanings.

13. here and hear are also different words with different meanings.

14. taught and taut are also different words with different meanings.

I won’t presume to give reasons or grammar lessons regarding the above “peeves”. Those that know the reasons would just laugh at my poor attempts. Others need the exercise in the learning process.

Some other “pet peeves” are:

1. There is no such thing as a “HOT water heater”. HOT water evidently doesn’t need to be heated. There may be some rare instances in industry or scientific laboratories where water already heated may need to be heated to a higher temperature (superheated), but the majority of “water heaters” are simply used to heat water of an ambient temperature.

2. Contrary to most Yankee opinions, us “rednecks” do not address a solitary person as “Y’ALL”. If we say to a solitary person “Y’all come to see us.” we simply mean that the invitation is extended to their entire family or organization. It’s courtesy. Something most Yankees would be unable to recognize anyway.

3. When someone says ”I could care less”, what they are really saying is “I care”. If they could care less, it is obvious they MUST care some in order to care “less”. Possibly, what they meant to say is “I couldn’t care less”. If they could not care less they are saying they have no care for the subject in the discussion.

4. When someone investigates an organization or some thing, it is often reported that they have performed “due diligence”, indicating they have thoroughly researched the matter. Occasionally, some writer will make the error of stating that “do diligence” has been performed.

5. Sometimes a person will describe an object or a happenstance as a “one off”. What they should say is that it is a “one of”. “One off” has no relevance or meaning.

6. Tense has two meanings. Stressed is one. The other one has to do with time reference, such as “past tense, present tense, etc.” It is a matter of grammar. Example: When you want to say ……… “I walked to town yesterday,” if you write “I walk to town yesterday,” it doesn’t say the same thing and only confuses the reader. Using UK or Australian grammar as an excuse doesn’t …….. wash. Grammar instructors in both nations would throw rocks at such poor excuses.

I read and enjoy a few stories on the web. It is frustrating to be reading an interesting story or research paper and get stopped or tripped up by an error which diverts attention or even distorts the thoughts of the writer.

response to deJay_13: I share your frustration at poor grammar and usage, such things can be a distraction. However when making such observations you should take care that you are not also making mistakes. Regarding #5 on your second list the correct phrase is in fact "one off" meaning something that occurs once - a simple google search will confirm this. You might say "one of these things" or similar but "one of" without something following it is not correct usage.

Regarding the story, while I have noticed some minor errors it is one of the better written stories on this site and I am enjoying it.

This cacophony of incompatible technology we rely upon is barely capable of relaying a coherent message. We are not surprised it fails so often, the only surprise is that it worked in the first place!

Speltczech is homophone-phobic coded by progroomers who are functionally illiterate!

 It is down-wrong hilarious when auto-replace functions place the wrong word in the correct context.

Punnies and malapropisms and even catachresis spice up the reading enjoyment for those of us who laugh at the pretentious nonsense palavered by the grimmer nasties. Undeniably the result of their misseducation.

If you have ever had the misfortustance to be forced to attend social functions/seminars/conferences for any Academic English Department of any institution of 'higher' learning,. You will notice that the 'educators' (with and without tenure) are divisible into three groups. Drunks, potheads and senile drunken potheads.

Academic English has got to be one of the worst methods of communication since neo-confuscianism. Noah Webster was a pre-mature fascist and Thomas Dewey was an incipient nazi.

liked this one until the mythology bullshit.

We all come here (Literotica) for some 'hot' stories and poems and more. You have some hot parts, but your story is great. I would've even enjoyed this as a straight up book.

Sure a few spelling and grammar mistakes could be fixed, amd at times the time line of events make it seem like there is more time in a day. But truly great work. Can't wait till I finish it.

You have taken the time and effort to make this story so good that I don't want to stop reading till the very last chapter. Thank you

You are one hell of a writer. You have great potential. If you are not already writing mainstream fiction, please consider it. I'll be first in line.

Started full military power and pushing it up. Great story.

1 John's an asshole for not going to the hospital to see the opposing player that he critically injured.

2 What happened(s) in the prior timeline when John and Rodger were sent back?

It's a roller coaster... a good one, compelling, pulling me along even when my gut is roiling in unease.

The first CD player was 1982. AIDS in the US started in 1981. Was there. Love your story, just couldn't help making the timing comment

What always cracks me up is this 50+ year old guy is such a fuck up as a teenager. And seriously his compete and total immaturity is simply unbelievable. And now he's crying about going back and seriously what the fuck is he going back to he's a lard ass salesman with no wife and no family like seriously wtf?

This is a great storyline, but so many stories on this site are about the main character being subject to angry decisions which causes them to suddenly leave. In this particular one; the MC is about to set out like a immature teenager ... Although he, supposedly has the thought processes and maturity of his adult, future self. The timeline/ reality that he now exists in is already been altered by his friends actions. He should understand that and make his own adjustments while moving forward. Just my insight and opinion.

I don't understand why he is so homesick for his old screwed up, lonely life!!!

MC is casanova thats banged every teenage fantasy, the milf next door, hot teacher and hot cheerleader. His thought process is more teenage then 50+ man but he is in the body of a 18 year old. And his old life was lonely why does he want to go back so much.