All Comments on 'Hilary and Haylie: Stranded Sapphic'

This could be a quite fun story and read too quickly! Adding a bit more meat (no pun intended) to the story's bones would make the plot POP. A bit more dialogue, more communication between the captain and sisters as the yacht founders in the storm, and a bit more description about coming to on the beach, their thoughts, fears, hopes, worries would round this out nicely. Regardless, a very promising start!