by kttysbehind
Extremely hot, I loved it. I would have been tempted to come in your mouth though...;)
I love the control and the touching, Just not the ass to mouth thing, just me. The way he fucks her ass then pulls out and goes back is stimulating, just not sucking it after the ass. She is his.
I liked your story for the raw lust. Don't stop writing but try to pay more attention to spelling, grammar and punctuation. I stumbled over the following sentence and several others because I initially didn't understand them. A story loses some its impact when the reader has to read a sentence a several times to understand it.
Please[d] with yourself [,] your hands move away from me [.] I look quickly at you [,] trying to see what could [have] happened [, to notice a change in] the look in your eyes. "Stand up!"