All Comments on 'His Dream Comes True Ch. 01'

Learn to write properly. I could not finish your story because of the execrable English! Your punctuation is awful, spelling bad and use of words abominable.

Stick to reading you are terrible

Sorry to say I only read half of a page of this story because there are so many errors from the start of your story It was being a real pain to read, you need someone to edit for you real bad, I don't know what your first language is but it surely can't be English.Learn English and try again and use an editor.