All Comments on 'His First Awakening'

But after that there was a lot of confusing POV shifting and other grammer and style issues that made it hard to understand. Try editing it to make the point of view consistant and it will be a much better story. (Though the femdom haters will still be all over you... *gives troll repellent.*)

So we meet again. icetiger, i have read some of your stuff on mydungeonspace. i would say that this is some of your earlier work. you have improved. Did you ever follow up on my abduction suggestion? As a sub, i like the idea of consent followed by being forced to obey and submit. Feel free to get in touch.

This story was sent to me by a very special sub of mine.. I enjoyed reading it as engaging as it was and it even ment more to me considering it was him who sent it.

I really liked the story, it was griping and woke feelings in me.

Sadly I was really put off by the changes in the person telling the with, first it was 'me' then 'him' then the mistress, then just her.