by LostBabygirl3489
What there is of this story is very good; it's what isn't there that is the problem: almost no introduction to the characters, not enough background or build-up to the story, a love scene that is too short, and an ending that is rather abrupt. Hopefully, the author will make good on the promise that this story is "to be continued".
Looking forward to the next chapter. I've had people in my life that, given the opportunity, I'd have loved to fuck like this. I appreciate that not every story needs a bunch of details, we can fill them in ourselves.