All Comments on 'His Return'

uh wtf is this a nonhuman or a what?

I love this story! You have a story worth continuing darling. I so can't wait for chapter 2! You have found a new fan in me!

but there's always a but..

It needs editing, really truly. and a bit of tidying up around the edges. Had me worried for a while, the guy with the purple eyes, who apparent;y has esp/ telekinesis and can probably kill people just by thinking about them.

Strange or something.

But all in all, a good tale,

Thanks,

Kilroy.

Im curious too! Is he a demon or an assassin? Who is tbis guy?

This great on soo many level.. it does need editing and structuring but wow.. don't stop!!

The tag says 'bwwm', yet he has mocha skin?! and she has red curls? And like the others, thing 'man' can't be human..

Okay so His origin...I dont know yet. I don't want him in a box. I want him to expand. He is human but he not just human he is more. Skin color. Okay so not mocha as mocha people tend to think chocolate but toffee.

And uhum im black and have abundant red curls thanks to dark and lovely hair dye.

Thank you for the comments it was my first try and I am glad you all like it. Structure is important so for the next chapter it will most definintely be better edited.

Hoping there's more on the way....

Oi long time......I've been busy....anewho next week more to come.

I hope to find out the answer to the $64K question....where has Dante been for the past 5 years?

I hope he does not disappoint her again!

Very sexy story...I can not wait to read more!

KittyOh48

For crying out loud PLEASE find an editor! I want to know what happens next, there is a lot of potential in the story, but the grammatical and punctuation errors are so prevalent that it is difficult to read the story.

Girl, no. Just no. You need to take several seats. I don't even have enough chairs for you.