by TTSoul
Y'know, usually I'd agree with anonymous. Usually you'd want build-up and conflict and character development. However, this is just so unabashedly ridiculous, that I like it. And usually I hate piss stuff. So over-the-top. I dig it. Keep it up!
This is a poorly written attempt at a story; you're obviously just pouring out a fantasy you have with little regard to plot, character or pacing. Slow down, put some thought into it and try again.