All Comments on 'Holiday Romance'

Please tell me there is another chapter coming with three-somes, four-somes and more somes.

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Cheers

Very exciting story. It would be nice to have the four of them sunbathing together in the nude beach. Also Patsy and Cindy watching closely as the mother and son in the act of intercource.

Brilliant story, very sexy! I enjoyed this a lot, I just hope it's the foundation for a lot more of the same to be posted.

Great!

Really enjoyable story, thank you

A great fantasy story. If only life was that easy

Thank you. A fun romp and a very enjoyable read. No one gets pregnant n a fantasy world.

I liked everything about that little story... But especially Cindy!! Most of us uptight and uncertain men could use a "Cindy" in our lives to help guide us into the good life. 5- Stars Miss_D_Mena

Switching back & forth between 1st and 3rd person was offputing, to say the least.

A very enjoyable story but a bit clumsy switching between the first and third person.

Not bad, but somewhat difficult to read. No doubt due to every paragraph having only one or two sentences. I'm assuming you were never taught what a paragraph is, that being a group of sentences covering a single idea.

Great story, don’t let the writing critics stop you!

Sorry, but it didn't work for me. I didn't like Cindy and couldn't understand the male character.

Good story. I liked it .

Wonderful and loving. So exciting, had me hard the whole time! 5*

From an erotic point of view, well done. From a literary standpoint, shifting points of view/narration and seemingly being dumped somewhat in the middle of a story left me disoriented. A simple sentence or so mentioning the middle of the story was a "flashback" or something would have made a huge difference. 4*

From an erotic point of view, well done. From a literary standpoint, shifting points of view/narration and seemingly being dumped somewhat in the middle of a story left me disoriented. A simple sentence or two identifying the center of the story as a "flashback" would have made a huge difference. 4*

Meh, the Cindy character didn't add much. There was little, to no affection or romance for that matter, between any of them. Fix the tags.

Wow! What a great story, and I loved how you brought it back around to the opening scene at the end. I did find the frequent and sudden changes in narrative distracting, but still gave it 5 stars for effort and eroticism.

One of your best yet! Thanks. Stu

Awesome story You outdid your self this time loved every bit of it and the part where Andy gave Patsy her first sex with a man and how they all fell in love with each other!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

No 4some? Incidentally, the woman carries the "seed," the man fertilises it.

Fantastic loved every bit of it and the best was when mom and son finally had sex you need to continue with more of this and maybe all three will have his child. Gave it a 5

Very nice story your build up was perfect and it all blended together nicely but you need to carry on with this story and add some children along the way with all of them living together gave it 5 stars.

another cracking story. It is now 39 days since you published this story are you going to sleep on the job?????

yes another good story, forget the literary critics. Are you working on a longer story it's now 39 days since this was published. Or are you taking a break. Either way looking forward to your next one

Another great story! The only problem I had with it is the ending seemed abrupt and rushed. Ratings need to be pushed up so we can give stories that merit them a higher rating. 5⭐

Great story but I am surprised they didn't all end up in bed together, surely that would be the logical conclusion! Maybe in a second episode.

Excellent, excellent story. You continue to out do yourself. Oh, and please excuse the anonymous. Literotica does not recognize my email address.