All Comments on 'Holiday slut: Orgin story'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

It came off as rushed and sadly it was nowhere close to realistic. Out of the girls he could find out there, he found his current’s girlfriend trans girl? Not to mention it was true that she was cheating with at least 2 other people so who is she to judge anyone. You need to work on your pacing and have more of a well thought out story and not just go with a cheap knockoff. Good luck.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Interesting, but not believable. The cheater is mad at the cheater? She just doesn't have enough dirt to make him go along with her plan. Just another "what else could I do" story, without having a decent blackmail to force such a drastic change.

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