All Comments on 'Holly's Holiday 'Pies'

Excellent story. Fun, believable, hot sex, likeable characters. Cries out for a sequel, great job 5*

This is an outstanding story. The sexual development is slow and natural, and the characters are all realistic and likeable.

Wonderfully crafted story. Smiled at the banter and games, got aroused at the sex. Engaging fun. Keep writing!

Everyone likeable

Is there a sequel coming soon? Can't wait for it!!

Great story! Sexy, hot, entertaining. Wish I could be there. Thoroughly enjoyed it, thanks for writing.

Ummmmm part 2? Christmas?

Fun, sexy, erotic. Empathetic and relatable characters, enjoyed the female point of view. Excellent Story!

Thanks to all for your kind comments and encouragement. I hadn't planned on a sequel, but based on some responses I may have to rethink that possibility . . .

Fantastic fun! A bit too realistic on the 20-year-old bro talk — “Now you’re a man” and that kind of crap — but otherwise wonderful.

Of course I wonder if Holly is protected. No doubt she is, since it never came up. But maybe she’s not. That thought is all it takes for me to follow Ben’s example and let fly.

Great story; fantasy cums true!

Love how you make a woman getting multiple creampies likeable, normal, sexy, and fun, rather than just becoming a slutty cumdump. Great story, 5*

Pretty awesome, I would say. Could’ve used a chapter 2 for sure. Still an option??

This could use a sequel.

Fun, erotic, hot. Great job!

A little long but really enjoyed the story. Keep up the good work.

Natural, relatable narrative, with interesting characters and plot. Hope you keep writing.

Excellent story, enough description, emotions and character development to make the sex all the more arousing without getting bogged down in back story details.

If you are going to exhibition something, it ought to be hairy, always! Five rating for "Inch by inch, my trimmed patch of pubic hair appeared, my bare labia, then my legs. My pubic hair was dark brown with auburn highlights, closely matching my natural hair color."

Makes me wish I was your cousin

Excellent. I really like your dialog and pacing. I like the first person voice. All around excellent. Well written. Thank you.

Excellent. Would love a sequel.

Great story. You are a fantastic writer, keep up the great work. See you in the next time

I smiled. Got wet and horny. Had to attack my hubby and get my own creampie! Love this, will definitely check out your other stories, numm.

This deserves a sequel.

Loved the story. Merry Christmas, ShadowLuver

Great story. Everyone seemed natural and believable, and Holly was a (wet) dream come true. A second chapter is a great idea, let's see how things play out over the next few days before the parents arrive and ruin the fun. A cum filled Holly for a whole week is an amazing turn on. It would also be interesting to hear the story from the guys' perspective.

And, by the way, the song is by the Merry Macs, and featured Bing Crosby:

Mairzy doats and dozy doats and liddle lamzy divey....

or

"Mares eat oats and does eat oats and little lambs eat ivy"

Fuck that was hot. Just wow. Fantastic writing; I could picture every minute and came right along with the rest. Thanks for sharing, look forward to more!