All Comments on 'Home from School'

Just a teaser, was going well but ended WAY too early, surely you could have waited until you had more going before posting. If this is all there is to the story though you shouldn't have bothered.

good start, nice build up...but you left it short

Good start. But there's barely any content. I hope you update soon with a longer follow-up.

I was aiming for a three but quickly dropped it to a one, way too short, way too fast, way too wordy. Finish the story next time.

A good start but a little tame. Unless you plan a follow-up story then this doesn't rate as incestuous.

It was a nice start, it read easily even though it was too short. it left me wanting more, i wanted to know who fully seduced who? was it awkward? details details details....

i hope you follow up with a continuation, just don't rush it ot cram it with too much too fast.

I didn't even have enough time to pull down my pants. Disappointed!

Teasing yes, nothing no.

There is a story here right? I could have done this myself because I don’t know how to tell a story. I gave you a 3 and thought to change it to a 2 but it won’t let me. More the pity.

This is only the first chapter. It builds up a bit slowly, but I'm trying to make it more realistic. I actually planned on having more stuff happen to build up but I cut some stuff because it already took a while. I hope people like the direction I'm taking it.

So, you didn't give a fuck about your own story enough to use a chapter number in the title to indicate this?

Goodnight sweet tits.

If the chapter is not at least 2.5 pages (single spaced) in a word program don't add it yet.

Flesh it out!

tell us what each of them look like, what their wearing, where do they live, where's his school, what's the house and neighborhood like, etc.... you want us to be able to picture it in ours minds.

I will be posting my own soon.. just looking for an editor with some time to edit.

Great start. Seems like there will be plenty of action to come. Looking forward to it.

why ? nothing happened . don't you know stories get better marks if they complete in one post.

I love their chemistry! It was disappointing that it came to an abrupt end. Don't leave everyone hanging without a part two!

Just give up

So many times during our teasing phase, something interrupted my mother and I when we were taking things to a new level.

Tell it how you want. I like a slow burn story.

It's a good start! Mr. Sexy Buns, huh?

Good start.

Nice start. Please continue.