All Comments on 'Homework and Chicken Noodle Soup'

An interesting set-up, and the snapper at the end was excellent.

But your grammar, spelling and syntax require quite a lot of work… they really got in the way of enjoying this story. Even a switch from third to first-person narrative! ("She said, feeling bad for teasing me too much.")

Don't give up, but please re-read your stories before submitting them!