by xaviermayne
What a sensitive and sexy story. I cried and laughed along with Will and Lucas (gay eh) and was so happy with the ending = even before Will met Juliet again. It was so funny as well. Just GREAT. I loved it.
I was wondering how you'd handle the difficulties of life & love for a Para-man. You skirted around some of the realities, but you gave the characters the ability to resolve problems. As a incomplete quad I loved this story.
Very nice, one of my favorite stories from you!
First I've read of yours, and this was simply amazing. I didn't expect to laugh so much, so that was a pleasant surprise. Honestly, I love everything about this story. Well done.
I'm always wary of the gay-man-turns-his-straight-friend plot device, but this was brilliant. Plausible, funny, original, beautifully written... lovely. Thank you for posting :-)
No matter how many times I read this I smile. It was sad, tragic and beautiful and the ending without being cruel was perfect.
Another fantastic, wonderful story, full of heartache and pain, before joy and happiness.
Such a great story! And just the right amount of humor.
its so sad and yet joyful in the end and however much i read it i just cant stop
A wonderful story! Loss, romance, inner struggle and found Love-Victory. Loved it...
Omg you made and awesome love story end with an epic bang. I love it. Julieet totally disserved that
Thank you
Just awesome, fantastic from the start to the finish...... Thank you!
it was your average 4 star gay male story until the end. That got the fifth star from me.
This is my favorite Literotica story, ever. I laughed HARD, many times, and I cried once or twice. Well done!!
I don't know if maybe I just didn't like this particular story as much or if the story lacked....I don't know something. I honestly got frustrated reading. It's gonna sound super mean/snotty but I felt like I was reading a teenagers diary. I'm not saying it was bad because it wasn't it just kinda fell short. *sigh* I did like the fact that they had a kid and Juliet got pretty much slapped in the face. Lol maybe other stories youve written I will like more. :) lots of potential! Don't stop writing.
TM
Wow, what a great story, I mean truly amazing, I loved everything about it
I have now read everything you have posted. I am very impressed and can hardly wait for your next story. And, I hope it will be soon.
James
WOW that is very inspiring story...love it. I want to read it over again again...hope to read more from you
read this again...it has alot of funny parts but the end was both sweet and kick ass in his having the perfect final words with Juliet!
Might sound odd, but maybe not. I had a dream about this story last night. So I am reading it Again. ♡
This was both nearly the most awkward and adorable story…cute but it was soooo awkward…
I loved the whole story, but the ending was my favorite part. Will shows her what she missed out on and he's finally happy with a son and Lucas.
You are the best. I am very disappointed that you have stopped posting your wonderful stories.
Following is a method for determining a story’s true rating:
5 Star Scale: Y=0.50 point... YN=0.25… N=0.00
STORY RATING
1- Compelling opening/hook: Y/YN/N _ Y
2- Steady progression & keeps interest: Y/YN/N _ Y
3- Surprise conclusion coalesces opening: Y/YN/N _ Y
4- Story is not rehash & is unpredictable: Y/YN/N _ Y
5- Has a unifying motif/theme & meaning: Y/YN/N _ Y
CHARACTERs RATING
6- Characters are distinct & memorable: Y/YN/N _ Y
7- They feel alive & grow throughout story: Y/YN/N _ Y
QUALITY RATING
8- Continually creates mental imagery: Y/YN/N _ Y
9- Subtext (Some deep info is only implied): Y/YN/N _ YN
10- Well written & cohesive; not a 1st draft: Y/YN/N _ Y
PERSONAL/INTANGIBLE RATING
a- I responded emotionally at some point: Y N _ Y
b- Story satisfied me and I want to re-read it: Y N _ Y
This story scores a 5.75 (out of 5)... the highest of any other story I've read using this scale. And, indeed, this story truly is a masterpiece. It is quite evident that the author put his heart into it... and so everyone who reads it will love it.
Tear jerker for me now I just hope I can find my Lucas! Truly beautiful story was so pleased with how Juliet ended up.
Don't Dylan and his soon to be brother, or sister have two daddies? I don't like that Will refers to Dylan as "mine" and the next baby as Lucas'. Regardless of who supplied the sperm the kids should be theirs. Also did Lucas and Will marry? A relationship of 5 years with two babies should be legally confirmed to ensure that come what may those kids will always be with at least one daddy.
I just read this for the second time. It manages to be hot and so sweet-a rare combination. Thanks!
Keep in mind that Will is speaking to his ex-wife who left him when she thought he couldn't give her what she wanted. He was making a point that the equipment was 100% functioning and that had she not been a selfish bitch, she could have had it all. Now, years later. he had a great relationship, a son and another child on the way while she has nothing.
just wish that we could know a little bit more about will and Lucas...i know it was vindictive but i really didn't like that Will called Dylan his and not "our"...it really dampened the mood...i also wish to know if they were married..
i enjoyed the character development. Including the back story which made it a little more believable. As to his son. I like the reference. He said he's mine earlier on as anyone would. Them later, instead of emphasizing which kid is which. He simply claims which sperm the child came from including the one waiting to be born. Helping to rub it in Juliet's face. :)
What a wonderful story line. Great development of characters. May I be so bold to say that this was much more than a gay romance story? It was a love story. In my eyes love was the main character, not the sexual identities. I am gay, but Will seemed to me that he did not turn gay. He returned the love that someone gave him. It was so natural that I personally think labeling it gay spoils it.
The emotion throughout the story as a whole is beautiful. Watching the plot evolve from such a low point in someone's life, pushing forward with friendship and love, to evolve into such strong committed relationship. Wonderful story, told as if painting a work of art.
Amazing story! I love everything you write, please do write some more!
Thanks for sharing!
Did it for me . I know I'm petty for relishing in Juliet's misfortune but eh. Also I really love your story, and they didn't even fuck... and yet you had my pussy throbbing wet, you're my hero dude and you have my love forever.
This was the cutest gayest thing ever! I fucking loved it so much!! Omg. PLEASE write more!!!!! 💕💕
This is one of the sweetest stories that I have read in a long time. I am so glad that Will found someone like Lucas, who worked things out and became happy together with a family. I am also glad to see a selfish person like Juliet got what she was waiting for NOTHING.
It's so difficult to find a person to be more than happy with, but content too. Juliet had her issues and was overwhelmed by them. He knew enough to buckle down and actually accept help when it was offered, even if he was a smartass. A truly well written romance.
I love this story. I've probably read it about 15 times and it's always as good as the first time I read it. I think your characters are very well developed and the story is very well written. And thank you so much for writing that ending with Julia. It may make me sound like a bad person but I'm glad she got to see Will happy and with a child. After what she did to him it was the perfect screw you 😊
Hi I love your work but I'm absolutely convinced there is a missing story of yours, about cops one of whom goes under cover in a pay to play camhouse.
Am I crazy or did it disappear.
You are remembering correctly! The story was Frat House Troopers, and I removed it from the site in 2012 when I arranged to have it published by Dreamspinner Press. You should check it out--it's available from the publisher as well as Amazon.
You have a great memory! I'm beyond flattered. Thanks for reading!
Terrific story, deftly and sensitively handled. Really first rate with characters I could care about. Thanks for the time and care you put into researching and writing this!
Welp, this is probably one of my favorites now. DAMN dude! I love the tragic opening and general theme but not being afraid to also include comedy.
Thanks for such a well researched and well written story. Also appreciated the correct spelling and grammar. Makes all the difference to me. Never read a story quite like this one. Really really enjoyed.
Seriously, this should be made into a movie. Tender and heartwarming, from tragedy to triumph with humor, compassion and real human emotion. You are an extraordinary writer! Thank you for presenting such a complete and well-written story! ~Jim
This is one of my favourite stories on this site, so tender and full of love. I’m so happy that Will and Lucas got their happy ending, it was so deserved.
Spectacular story! Had me laughing, crying, smiling, sad...felt it all! Amazing writing...beautiful...(Steve)
A most unique story, written with heart rending honesty and love. This one will stay with me a long, long time. Great work.
APPLAUSE. Didn't even notice at first the exhale I did at the end.
Love this story! I’ve come back and read this story so many times. The characters are great and the story so well written. Does it make me a bit** to be so happy to see his ex-wife gape like a fish at the end? Well, if it does, too bad. :D
The two of them rolling off into the distance, that could have been hers. Tough.
The ending. Zing! She was probably broken down inside and I have zero sympathy for her.
So many comments and I'm adding one more. That was great! When the love is there, the plumbing (and the offspring) follow.
PERFECT STORY. She got what she deserved didn’t like her one bit. And I’m so happy for Will and Lucas and their son Dylan! AWESOME STORY WOW :-)
Great, great story! I’ve read parts of this story before, but I’ve obviously never finished it becauseI had no idea the ex reappeared at the end.
So many things I can complement, but I want to say I love your dialogue. You do such a great job making both characters feel like different people. You even managed to create multiple scenes of them talking at each other while the other was genuinely confused, and it felt believable. That happens. People talk but get lost articulating themselves. And this story rightfully so would have that.
Also making a guy in a wheelchair the sexy star was not only heart warming, but very rewarding. I know people with disabilities, especially anything that affects their sex life, can be poisonous to their self esteem. I'm so glad you shared this story. I'm sure anyone struggling with their own limitations will be hopeful (and satisfied) after giving this a read!
It was the sweetest, most romantic, erotic story I’ve read. Awesome writing. That’s coming from a 64 yr old women who then sent it to her daughters. They loved it also.
Absolutely one of my favorites!!! Loved the ending. That’s what she gets for being a twat!!
This is one my favourite stories on Lit! I have read and re-read it many times and it is an amazing story of perseverance and commitment!
So well done! It is one of my favorites. I have read it several times and loved it each time. The scene with Julliett at the end really finishes it effectively.
This is already a perfect story and then the ending takes it to an even higher level!