All Comments on 'Hope Among the Deserted'

Omg, that was an amazing story 😍 So glad karma caught up with Juliet 🤭

This is already a perfect story and then the ending takes it to an even higher level!

So well done! It is one of my favorites. I have read it several times and loved it each time. The scene with Julliett at the end really finishes it effectively.

Well done. Charming. And a lovely little zinger for the baddie at the end.

This is one my favourite stories on Lit! I have read and re-read it many times and it is an amazing story of perseverance and commitment!

Absolutely one of my favorites!!! Loved the ending. That’s what she gets for being a twat!!

Awesome. Love is love.

Totally loved it!!

This story was awesome! Loved every bit.

It was the sweetest, most romantic, erotic story I’ve read. Awesome writing. That’s coming from a 64 yr old women who then sent it to her daughters. They loved it also.

This is the 2nd time I read this the end always gets me

Great, wonderful story.

Love this story. Have read it several times. Love is love!

So many things I can complement, but I want to say I love your dialogue. You do such a great job making both characters feel like different people. You even managed to create multiple scenes of them talking at each other while the other was genuinely confused, and it felt believable. That happens. People talk but get lost articulating themselves. And this story rightfully so would have that.

Also making a guy in a wheelchair the sexy star was not only heart warming, but very rewarding. I know people with disabilities, especially anything that affects their sex life, can be poisonous to their self esteem. I'm so glad you shared this story. I'm sure anyone struggling with their own limitations will be hopeful (and satisfied) after giving this a read!

Great, great story! I’ve read parts of this story before, but I’ve obviously never finished it becauseI had no idea the ex reappeared at the end.

Thank You for this Love Story of, Hope, Love and Joy.

Awesome Story.

PERFECT STORY. She got what she deserved didn’t like her one bit. And I’m so happy for Will and Lucas and their son Dylan! AWESOME STORY WOW :-)

So many comments and I'm adding one more. That was great! When the love is there, the plumbing (and the offspring) follow.

The ending. Zing! She was probably broken down inside and I have zero sympathy for her.

The two of them rolling off into the distance, that could have been hers. Tough.

Holy crap on a cracker chick, that story was awesome, so good 😘

Love this story! I’ve come back and read this story so many times. The characters are great and the story so well written. Does it make me a bit** to be so happy to see his ex-wife gape like a fish at the end? Well, if it does, too bad. :D

good one

APPLAUSE. Didn't even notice at first the exhale I did at the end.

A most unique story, written with heart rending honesty and love. This one will stay with me a long, long time. Great work.

What a great story. Loved the ending

Spectacular story! Had me laughing, crying, smiling, sad...felt it all! Amazing writing...beautiful...(Steve)

Nice calming story

Beautiful and touching! Thx so much for creating this and sharing it. <3

This is one of my favourite stories on this site, so tender and full of love. I’m so happy that Will and Lucas got their happy ending, it was so deserved.

Seriously, this should be made into a movie. Tender and heartwarming, from tragedy to triumph with humor, compassion and real human emotion. You are an extraordinary writer! Thank you for presenting such a complete and well-written story! ~Jim

Thanks for such a well researched and well written story. Also appreciated the correct spelling and grammar. Makes all the difference to me. Never read a story quite like this one. Really really enjoyed.

Best story ever!!!!!

Great story I loved it gives me hope my Dylan is out there!

Thank you for this! Great story!

Welp, this is probably one of my favorites now. DAMN dude! I love the tragic opening and general theme but not being afraid to also include comedy.

Terrific story, deftly and sensitively handled. Really first rate with characters I could care about. Thanks for the time and care you put into researching and writing this!

this is great, much love

You are remembering correctly! The story was Frat House Troopers, and I removed it from the site in 2012 when I arranged to have it published by Dreamspinner Press. You should check it out--it's available from the publisher as well as Amazon.

You have a great memory! I'm beyond flattered. Thanks for reading!

Hi I love your work but I'm absolutely convinced there is a missing story of yours, about cops one of whom goes under cover in a pay to play camhouse.

Am I crazy or did it disappear.

I love this story. I've probably read it about 15 times and it's always as good as the first time I read it. I think your characters are very well developed and the story is very well written. And thank you so much for writing that ending with Julia. It may make me sound like a bad person but I'm glad she got to see Will happy and with a child. After what she did to him it was the perfect screw you 😊

It's so difficult to find a person to be more than happy with, but content too. Juliet had her issues and was overwhelmed by them. He knew enough to buckle down and actually accept help when it was offered, even if he was a smartass. A truly well written romance.

This is one of the sweetest stories that I have read in a long time. I am so glad that Will found someone like Lucas, who worked things out and became happy together with a family. I am also glad to see a selfish person like Juliet got what she was waiting for NOTHING.

This was the cutest gayest thing ever! I fucking loved it so much!! Omg. PLEASE write more!!!!! 💕💕

Did it for me . I know I'm petty for relishing in Juliet's misfortune but eh. Also I really love your story, and they didn't even fuck... and yet you had my pussy throbbing wet, you're my hero dude and you have my love forever.

Amazing story! I love everything you write, please do write some more!

Thanks for sharing!

The emotion throughout the story as a whole is beautiful. Watching the plot evolve from such a low point in someone's life, pushing forward with friendship and love, to evolve into such strong committed relationship. Wonderful story, told as if painting a work of art.

What a wonderful story line. Great development of characters. May I be so bold to say that this was much more than a gay romance story? It was a love story. In my eyes love was the main character, not the sexual identities. I am gay, but Will seemed to me that he did not turn gay. He returned the love that someone gave him. It was so natural that I personally think labeling it gay spoils it.

i enjoyed the character development. Including the back story which made it a little more believable. As to his son. I like the reference. He said he's mine earlier on as anyone would. Them later, instead of emphasizing which kid is which. He simply claims which sperm the child came from including the one waiting to be born. Helping to rub it in Juliet's face. :)

just wish that we could know a little bit more about will and Lucas...i know it was vindictive but i really didn't like that Will called Dylan his and not &quot;our&quot;...it really dampened the mood...i also wish to know if they were married..

lovely story lovely writing

Keep in mind that Will is speaking to his ex-wife who left him when she thought he couldn't give her what she wanted. He was making a point that the equipment was 100% functioning and that had she not been a selfish bitch, she could have had it all. Now, years later. he had a great relationship, a son and another child on the way while she has nothing.

I just read this for the second time. It manages to be hot and so sweet-a rare combination. Thanks!

Don't Dylan and his soon to be brother, or sister have two daddies? I don't like that Will refers to Dylan as "mine" and the next baby as Lucas'. Regardless of who supplied the sperm the kids should be theirs. Also did Lucas and Will marry? A relationship of 5 years with two babies should be legally confirmed to ensure that come what may those kids will always be with at least one daddy.

Tear jerker for me now I just hope I can find my Lucas! Truly beautiful story was so pleased with how Juliet ended up.

Following is a method for determining a story’s true rating:

5 Star Scale: Y=0.50 point... YN=0.25… N=0.00

STORY RATING

1- Compelling opening/hook: Y/YN/N _ Y

2- Steady progression & keeps interest: Y/YN/N _ Y

3- Surprise conclusion coalesces opening: Y/YN/N _ Y

4- Story is not rehash & is unpredictable: Y/YN/N _ Y

5- Has a unifying motif/theme & meaning: Y/YN/N _ Y

CHARACTERs RATING

6- Characters are distinct & memorable: Y/YN/N _ Y

7- They feel alive & grow throughout story: Y/YN/N _ Y

QUALITY RATING

8- Continually creates mental imagery: Y/YN/N _ Y

9- Subtext (Some deep info is only implied): Y/YN/N _ YN

10- Well written & cohesive; not a 1st draft: Y/YN/N _ Y

PERSONAL/INTANGIBLE RATING

a- I responded emotionally at some point: Y N _ Y

b- Story satisfied me and I want to re-read it: Y N _ Y

This story scores a 5.75 (out of 5)... the highest of any other story I've read using this scale. And, indeed, this story truly is a masterpiece. It is quite evident that the author put his heart into it... and so everyone who reads it will love it.

You are the best. I am very disappointed that you have stopped posting your wonderful stories.

I loved the whole story, but the ending was my favorite part. Will shows her what she missed out on and he's finally happy with a son and Lucas.

This was both nearly the most awkward and adorable story…cute but it was soooo awkward…

i love this

Might sound odd, but maybe not. I had a dream about this story last night. So I am reading it Again. ♡

read this again...it has alot of funny parts but the end was both sweet and kick ass in his having the perfect final words with Juliet!

WOW that is very inspiring story...love it. I want to read it over again again...hope to read more from you

I have now read everything you have posted. I am very impressed and can hardly wait for your next story. And, I hope it will be soon.

James

This was a great story, please write more!

Wow, what a great story, I mean truly amazing, I loved everything about it

I don't know if maybe I just didn't like this particular story as much or if the story lacked....I don't know something. I honestly got frustrated reading. It's gonna sound super mean/snotty but I felt like I was reading a teenagers diary. I'm not saying it was bad because it wasn't it just kinda fell short. *sigh* I did like the fact that they had a kid and Juliet got pretty much slapped in the face. Lol maybe other stories youve written I will like more. :) lots of potential! Don't stop writing.

TM

This is my favorite Literotica story, ever. I laughed HARD, many times, and I cried once or twice. Well done!!

it was your average 4 star gay male story until the end. That got the fifth star from me.

Thank you

Just awesome, fantastic from the start to the finish...... Thank you!

Omg you made and awesome love story end with an epic bang. I love it. Julieet totally disserved that

A wonderful story! Loss, romance, inner struggle and found Love-Victory. Loved it...

its so sad and yet joyful in the end and however much i read it i just cant stop

Such a great story! And just the right amount of humor.

Another fantastic, wonderful story, full of heartache and pain, before joy and happiness.

No matter how many times I read this I smile. It was sad, tragic and beautiful and the ending without being cruel was perfect.

a second time

I'm always wary of the gay-man-turns-his-straight-friend plot device, but this was brilliant. Plausible, funny, original, beautifully written... lovely. Thank you for posting :-)

First I've read of yours, and this was simply amazing. I didn't expect to laugh so much, so that was a pleasant surprise. Honestly, I love everything about this story. Well done.

I was wondering how you'd handle the difficulties of life & love for a Para-man. You skirted around some of the realities, but you gave the characters the ability to resolve problems. As a incomplete quad I loved this story.

Very nice, one of my favorite stories from you!

What a sensitive and sexy story. I cried and laughed along with Will and Lucas (gay eh) and was so happy with the ending = even before Will met Juliet again. It was so funny as well. Just GREAT. I loved it.

I love the repetition of "silence"

AND LOVED LOVED LOVED THE ENDING she shouldn't of left him like that it was horrid. but i loved how it played out

A difficult subject, handled with sensitivity and humour. Well done.

I was very skeptical at first with this story, it being the first story on this site that I have seen featuring someone in wheelchair, at all. You managed to make it a wonderful story, and adorable too. The ending was priceless her reaction was just too good. Congratulations on creating a marvelous piece of art!

Not gonna lie I was a bit wary at first but then OMG!! I fell in love. I hope out there somewhere are two people exactly like this,and this is their story so beautifully written.. Well done.

You made the entire story believable from begining to end. I'd read something along these lines years ago in the middle of the Viet Nam War but, it wasn't nearly as good or detailed.

The sex, while expertly written was not the focal point of the story but, it was the crux of the plotline since you know that nothing can or will work out if that can't. I enjoyed the way you developed the story and made the sex perpetuate the story without being center.

I would consider your story well written and I would enjoy a novel written in your style and hand because we all know, there aren't enough good novels around with gay characters that are worth their salt...but, I believe you could pull it off and it would make for good reading, gay, lesbian or straight.

Kudos, my friend. Encore!!

I am posting this as anonymous only because I haven't decided on a name or handle for myself on this site. I may want to try my hand at a story or two as well and so, I want the name and/or handle, to be right.

I'll be watching for more from you or looking to see if there is more already. Oh, and I'd buy a copy of your book!

I really enjoyed this story, not the least because the depictions of sexual activity, whilst frequent, are never the sole justification for the story but are the servants of the plotline.

Both Lucas and Will seem ideally suited to one another and the fact that they can banter as they do suggests that their relationship will be long and happy and even fruitful.

I suspect this is one story I shall return to again and again.

More please

...........but I'm glad you passed this way.

Have enjoyed SO much what you've left behind. Indeed.

the story was beautiful And the ending was fabulous i could really see that god aweful womans reaction XD

...lasted about five seconds after I read the ending and then I laughed my butt off. Serves her right.

I love your writing. Your stories are the best and I'm thrilled that you're publishing now. Don't forget us here at Lit.

ah....juliet?(waving to catch her attention) IN-YOUR-FACE!!!!lord have some mercy this is the best the story was so well crafted it was real it was fantastic i will read it again and for everyone who missed it juliet missed out on her romeo because she caved like a punk when the going got tough and for all the juliet's out here in the real world if you ever did this to you man when he came home from defending your country IN-ALL YOUR-FACES!!lol loved it so much thank you

This is probably the 15th time I am reading this & I still keep coming back to it.

The characters are so real & make you cry & laugh in that order.

You are very talented & congrats on publishing FHT.

Fridayschild :)

I couldn't just leave Will and Lucas here. They are an important part of Frat House Troopers, my most popular story ever on Lit, which has now been published by Dreamspinner Press, in both e-book and paperback formats.

I've appreciated so very much the encouragement I've received from the Literotica community, and I think you'll enjoy seeing what the future holds for Will and Lucas, and some other members of their extended family whom you really should meet.

More info and links to order the book are here: http://xaviermayne.com/?p=81

This was a great story. It was simple, sweet, and romantic. I love that Will was so gracious to Juliet even though she's such a repressed bitch. Also, I love that they chose Donnelly's sister to be their surrogate; what a wonderful way to honor his memory.

Congrats on getting published!

guess juliet feels bad she didnt keep will as her romeo to bad so sad foor her BUT

Lucas knows a romeo when he see one and he and will have those kids she didnt think he could have well her lose.

i love it. It's so sweet and actually pretty realistic.

two words: amazingly beautiful.

truly love this story.

I've read it more than 3 times. I loved every single bits of it. I wish I'm a lucky bastard like will. Shit that is epic