All Comments on 'Horny School Girl'

No points for allowing me to suspend my disbelief, because I couldn't.

Still, you had decent grammar and spelling; loads of dialogue; even more loads of explosive sex; a sense of humour; featured a PYT; and left me wanting more. The title was not clever, but was descriptive, accurate and enticing. Add bonus points for a newbie writer deserving encouragement and I gave it a "5" even though the cock slapping against the stomach was a disturbing image, and the whole big cock thing was overdone to the point of racial stereotyping.

I hope that you expand your horizons, including writing longer stories.

Sure wish Mr. Nelson had been my teacher. He could have kept me after school any time.

Def my type of story! Loved it. Please write part 2

Love the first time effort, hope to see part 2 soon.

Noice

More Please 5*

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