by phoenixcinders
Thank so much for reading my story, please feel free to comment!
Loved it, can't wait for the next part hope he doesn't give in to easily everyone loves a little bit of a fight
I mean usually I can get behind a dominant forced futa-on-male story like no other, but this story went a bit far, I didn't need four pages of this poor kid's life being ruined to lead up to half a page of what I wanted.
What I'm saying is I CAN'T FAP TO THIS
Another great futanari story from Phoenix, I really hope and can’t wait for more.
This seemed like a personal "fuck you" from a heartless writer to her trusting audience. I'm disgusted & embarrassed that I fell for this cruel ploy.
The pushing the youth into such a vulnerable position in this fast manner screams more in violent and then submission. It just broke my suspension too much.
This was so damn depressing, honestly. Like, fuck, in that sort of situation, I would've just been absolutely depressed.
I can see where a lot of the harsher commenters are coming from when they talk about too many depressing themes hitting too soon. I mostly enjoyed the very end, it was bitter-sweet, but it did need pacing. I also think perhaps making Sarah the key behind the whole company coming together so it could be taken could've been a little less obvious, but thats besides the point. TL:DR Pacing needs work, But still a great story.
I just don't see this ending well. It's not like it's a slow thing. We're seeing a young man, boy, really, who quite obviously is poor with social interactions basically losing everything. He certainly doesn't appear to be grounded emotionally either. Honestly, the most realistic scenario here is he's going to commit suicide.
Loved this story so much. Still hopeing you will give us a part 2 <3
That was a emotional roller coaster, loved every word. Truly deserves a second part
Keep up the amazing writing
If I was Peter, I would have grabbed a pen and paper, wrote down "Katlin Black killed me" , broke a window and jumped out. He lost everything for a rich self centered fucking bitch. She destroyed his and his father's dream just to make a slave out of a boy. A genius at that. A boy that might have changed the world just for an ass to fuck. Not a fan of this story.
It's funny how the actual devil is involved in this story, yet Sarah manages to be the most evil character. Using the protagonist the way she did. Great heart wrenching story tho. Sometimes its cathartic to read a story that can inflict such strong emotions in people, regardless if said emotions are negative or positive oriented towards the characters (Joffrey from Game of Thrones is a good example of what I mean). That being said, I didn't feel like the ending wasn't quite satisfying enough. Felt like it ended a little abruptly. For example, I would've liked to see him confront Kailyn about moving his mother to a new location, or a proper confrontation with Sarah. I know the chances are essentially next to none, given the title of the story and the fact that the nightmarish ending has indeed been achieved, but still, I hope you consider writing a second part. A sort of ''what happened after the incident'' situation.