by kirsESS
I love the MILF story lines, but this one raced to the bedroom. He barely harassed the son, I'm not sure if there's a husband to be accounted for or not, and the entire sex act was over in 3 short paragraphs.
You made a common mistake by starting in first-person perspective. That only works if the narrator is ever-present. The moment he went shopping, you had to flip to third-person.
Please keep trying - but get an editor to help you write better.
Hot! I would have made the first move. I would have given Clyde the best blow job he ever had and let my mom and sister watch.