by PMDlite
But I reached the end and my main thought was "Is that all there is?" So much potential lost with the quick ending. Hints at additional action left unfulfilled.
This deserves either to be rewritten and expanded upon (best option) or a sequel.
Hope you win....reminds me of water fights that got "out of hand"! ;-)
I'd prefer the melons, myself.... But a nice romp of a story! Hope he does go visit her at college!
DON'T taste funny! You added too much salt! They didn't need any more salting than they already had! Next Chapter, Please!
Thanks - good story! So that's why the tomatoes taste funny!