All Comments on 'Hotel Ch. 01'

You should have just left her but I forgot, your not much of a man, yikes.

Don't be discouraged by the irrational comments and attacks you will get from men thraetened by this kind of story. Those of us who like hot or dominant wives will love it.

... the poor grammer and spelling (especially the spelling, i.e. "quiet" instead of "quite", was very distracting. While your husband is rather flustered, that is the nature of this genre - if someone does not like it, do not criticize the topic, just read a different genre.

Sorry but as a rational human being why on earth would you get turned on by this? Secondly how could you let this happen? Oh of course you enjoy this type of thing. To those who will complain about the comments. Untill we are told othrewise not to, this is a free country ( or used to be) we have the right to complain about anything we don't agree with. If however this type of story is your thing fine, say what a good job the writer is doing, but please stop complaining about the complaints.

I don't think we should be critiquing others for grammar when we are not able to tell the difference between the word "grammar" and "grammer." <p>

For some, "quite" is easily confused with "quiet". <p>

Even if my life depended on it, I have never been able to remember whether it is "ocassion" or "occasion" (without spell check, that is). <p>

Yes, spelling is a crucial ingredient in good writing; but to me that's one of the less important things. Character development, clear plots, clear setting, believability factor, etc..... I will try reading a story that starts out being refreshing, believable, clever/original, even if it has spelling and other irritating errors. <p>

But if a "story" starts out: "My name is Virginia and when I look at myself everyday, I see such a beautiful reflection. Big breasts, perfect vagina made for big black cocks, especially because they are so different from my loving husband, who is a heart surgeon. I love my swimming pool and 6 bedroom mansion; but I love strange cocks more..." I mean, what kind of a "story" is such nonsense. <p>

I don't hate "cheating stories" per se. Madam Bovary, for example, is a great book. So is The Scarlete Letter. But, again, such stories have character development, plots, settings, and twisted morals of some type to talk about. Not just, "Oh, my god, I love Black men. They give me so much fluids to swallow," ad nauseam. <p>

I've NOT read THIS story here; I saw a critic not knowing the difference between GRAMMAR and GRAMMER, when he's criticizing the author, FOR GRAMMAR, so I thought I said something... This, therefore, is a readership criticism not a story/author criticism...Hence, ignore the "50" rating.

other critiquers than the plot or story. Says a lot about having their balls cut off years ago. Three major comments. The girl assigned to you to keep you busy would have been very willing to fuck you in that effort, you lost out there. Next, you never let your friends or work associates fuck you wife, they will turn her into a regular fuck or whore and make fun of you. Last, you never ever leave you wife alone with a man or men, you stay near in case someone begins to harm or injure her, that part is your responsibility. Myself, if she gets some, I want a female to get my share.

I don't know where this shit comes frfom I strongly suspect it's from British writers who are into humiliation. First of all no guys that have just fucked anothers wife have smirks on their faces. I think that is part of the humiliation that you Britisher wimps want to impart at just how much humiliation the receive. A real man would tell his wife to go on and that she can stay as she will not have a place to live with him afterward. Lets see how many hot drippy cunted wives will feel after thai. marriedwithballs@yahoo.com

you allready lost or the character in the story. you might get everything from aids to hepatitis but for sure not the truth and never any real love from her anymore. otherwise she would have told everything a long time ago.

Literotica needs to make a separate area entitled "Cuckold/Gay.

Good start, keep writing

I don't see any problem with the wife fucking her friend, but the bitch should have made damn sure, that her hubby was taken care of, or done it herself, instead of going to sleep.

It sounds like she wants everything just for herself. I think the author needs to complete the story,so we can find out what is in it for hubby, or is he just going to be left holding his own cock.............Rich

I really enjoyed this one as it hit very close to home. I want to hear more please.

You know for every good English writer there are 83 wimps into self disrespect and male humiliation. Are you wimpets bored or just plain stupidly so jaded nothing else works?<P>

You dishonor the isles with your sick addiction for disrespect and other cocks.

Poor grammar and spelling is distracting to many people, including me. There were several mistakes in the first two paragraphs alone. There are hundreds of editors here willing to help. Why not use one? ... I'm fine with the story genre, but this story seems a bit on the superficial side. ... Also, stories of this genre should ALWAYS have a foreward that warns the reader of the content. Admittedly, we have seen plenty of idiots who have read cuckold stories with forewarnings, then went on to criticize the genre and authors anyway. However, with a forewarning, at least those "in-the-know" could then laugh at them. After all, these "read the story anyway" genre critics are really closet cuckolds who haven't come out yet. They masturbate to these stories, get wanker's remorse, then attack the authors... lol ... But until Literotica creates an appropriate category for cuckold stories, a warning forward is a MUST!

This is a very promising tale from a new author who should be given constructive criticism (if not praise).

Just what is your problem Hank; was you wife seduced by a British guy(s)? That might explain why you habitually come this site, hide behind your keyboard and attack every cuckold story written by a UK author.

Literotica stories under the heading 'Loving Wives' will tend to have cuckold/hotwife themes so why don't you just avoid them?

Do all the millions (rather than the hundreds of thousands in the UK) in the USA get special treatment from you as it's only British writers that you find fault with.

America has plenty of its own problems so why don't you look around your neighbourhood and do something positive about your own declining country?

Every now and then a loving wives story is about somthing other than a little dicked perv. husband and a slut whore wife, unless written buy a U.K. writer. Being envolved in soccer I know lots of Britts, Scotts and Irish yet none of them are into being a cockold so its not the water, just the little perv. writers.

Keep up the good work and don't let these racist bigots discourage you! If you write what you find erotic then you are sure to find others that enjoy the same kind of material.

If you find this erotic, you have a serious problem and racisem doesn't have shit to do with anything here, asshole!

Hard to read, plot is dismal & boring. Character development is absent and the stupid male needs to grow some balls. As others have commented, he should have left the slut wife there to fulfill her true career choice.

Love to see a sequel and continued building of your story.

The disease is spreading - not good!

Stupid comments, they add nothing, have no insight and contribute nothing. Too many quick moronic judgments by bullies. The story had potential, keep going and ignore these crass people.

and I fucking love it.

I can't wait for two.

Got a little something nasty passed on by his ex slut, the lifestyle isn't much fun when your little nuts turn black.

try to add more chapters in new York story as well.

Awesome,What Happens Next ...!

Yes please continue with the story

go for more hate stories that end there what will he do be a wimp or a real man

Why would you stop there???? You had me dripping at,.... "Flushed with sheen of sweat on their faces"

Please continue someday....

Moronic cuck shit for sure. Guess the comments weren't favorable enough to keep him writing. Thank heavens.

I dream of that situation with my wife taking on a few of our male friends.

Anonymous below, why not send me her number.

Faithful women dont exist. So men dont feel bad about cheating on the bitch.