by Top18TS
I wish there was a chapter 2 but it's been over 10 years so I won't hold my breath...
excellent buildup....dont stop now. Although, to make it just a teensy bit believable and thus, more enjoyable, try and keep the phallic proportions a tad bit realistic. Something that a TS lover COULD take down his throat.
I enjoyed the start of what has the potential to be a great series, I am looking forward to future additions.
Well done! I was really enjoying the entire story, wish I could see the finish!!Thank you Very much!
It has been a long time since you started this, but I hope you will continue it one day. I really enjoyed it and thanks!
I just hate how this was written a year ago; it means you probably aren't writing a second chapter
If you read this, please make another one =(
very nice, so hot....and the dialogue does add sooo much to it....WOW!!
I am anxiously awaiting the next installment. Loved the seduction and interaction. The dialogue is good.
I loved your description of the boy's ambivalence, but I prefer reading about real cocks, not the porno-monster-baby's fist stereotype. Too bad, 'cause the verbal interactions are great!!!
I simply can't wait for the next part. I love your writing and I'd love to be a part of your story Princess. I just love Top T-Girls :)
If this is your first time then you are very gifted. That story was perfect for a starting point!
Your approach is classic; the guy is straight but he's scared and turned on at the same. However, your style is much more careful and layered.
Most other authors try to say that the complement of excitement along with the fear is a product of latency. Aside from being a re-hash, that idea is a real boner-killer.
You on the other hand, are making sure to demonstrate how she's hypnotizing him by manipulating his desire to please beautiful girls so as to persuade him to keep going on an emotional level rather than a sexual one.
Don't lose this pace. i.e. Don't automatically make him warm up to cocks and gender-bending just because she's a tranny. It is crucial for the tone of your story that he remain uncomfortable with her penis at least until the climax. Gradually making him proud of servicing her appendage was a nice and subtle development, but don't make him move to fast.
Keep going! :D
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