by beguiled999
I'm not sure if i liked this chapter or not .They both seem to be a little crazy .
Would love to read the next chapter...these two are so sick it's awesome!
IF you really want to improve as a writer ( and i doubt you do ) you will ignore all fake kiss ass reviews and listen only to the complaints. kiss ass reviews will boost your ego and keep you from learning and you will keep posting subpar stories. the best thing you can do is delete all stories and rewrite them using a GOOD EDITOR or GHOST WRITER that knows how to write a GOOD erotic story.
A hot story most of the way through. But the urination at the end ruined the whole thing for me. Incest may be a perversion, but it's an understandable (and relateable) one. The first time I encountered this urination fetish was in a biography of Adolph Hitler, who was unable to O unless his woman was pissing on him. That's why his niece/mistress committed suicide. Great goin', Champ.
..... there's not going to be any more of this, is there !
Damn.
It never finished, such a good story too.
Oh well, 3/5 because it is an unfinished story.