All Comments on 'How to Fall in Love Immediately Ch. 01'
by hookd
- 6 Comments
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoMy deployments never ended up like this!!!!! Id end up on a KC-10 next to a Maj that spread out to take up both armrests the environmental system was set at 2 as usual. Too damned cold or hot. No gals on the bird either. Damned good story. Dearly looking forward to PT 2.
3 stars
Dragonrider55 Ret Tsgt USAF
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoA good start, I think. Likeable characters and a good premise. I look forward to their experiences and discoveries as they continue their getting to know you phase. Thanks for your time and imagination.
FormerReaderalmost 5 years agoNo matter what happens for real I hope you will continue with fiction if need be. I am liking these two and their connection. On to Part 2!
jetpacksamalmost 5 years agoPick a tense and stay there, you slipped back and forth several times.
As others have said, get an editor.
Anonymousover 4 years agoI am enjoying this a lot. Please continue.
