by totallyatease
Leaving us wanting more! Please post more ASAP
Best Regards,
R
I bet from the sofa they will then need to be naked for body heat,haha!!
But these two page chapters are killing me LOL
Just when the story starts to get interesting i get to end and then the waiting starts, i love the story but you are turning my hair grey with all the waiting, i hope that you will post the next chapter soon :)
You really need to learn the right places for punctuation, like this "I think we need to establish something Izzy..." there should be a comma after something, before her name, it's missing in all of your chapters. Among other things, and you certainly like to drag out your stories and have meek female characters, that to be honest, gets rather boring.
Nice story, can't wait for the next chapters. Keep them coming. And please, keep the romance don't make it smut.
Even though I agree you do have some work on your punctuation, I personally do not find your story line to be corny or old fashioned. I quite like how you have portrayed your characters. And I believe your story line flows greatly. I certainly hope that you continue and finish the story, I can't wait to read it.
The storyline is pretty good. If people say its old fashioned or doesnt belong on the site then they don't have to read it - not all erotica is wham, bang, thank you mam type things.
I stumbled upon your story a couple of days ago, and loved it from the first chapter. Yes, the people complaining about punctuation are correct. However, your prose, characters, and dialogue are top-notch. I have read stories from authors where the grammar was perfect; unfortunately, some were very boring. If the story is interesting and can keep me entertained, I can certainly get over a few mistakes in punctuation
- Kristina
.....I don't like it as much as the others. The way Daniel is acting, all gruff and practically menancing.....it seems more like he's forcing her than anything else. The other chapters were much better, where Izzy seemed a stronger character.
This story has so many timeless and classical elements of how lasting romance blossoms. I am completely hooked in the story, waiting to see how they progress. Thank you for the wonderful love story.
I really like where this is going :) Im a pervert,, hense me reading on this site lol but im really a romantic at heart, and I like your story.
Believe there may have been some mention of corny and old-fashioned in past comments. Perhaps that is what makes this so delightful a story. If so, more please.