by totallyatease
There’s that Victorian sensibility again. The housekeeper saying “he’s just a man” and implying that he can’t keep his hands to himself for one night. I just cannot see the characters as living in modern day times.
Izzy is finally doing some growing and trying to experience life, but still seems to be a bit scared.
Daniel still has his beast/dragon temper (or is it hunger?) that he needs to tame.
The biggest problem now seems to be Jessie being the overprotective one who doesn’t want little sis to grow up and experience life. Perhaps it has to do with the way she perceives her after the illness, but if they’d been more forthcoming about that from the start, the story might have been less complicated and a whole lot shorter! Lol
Thanks for sharing, as always.
Anonymous-19
This Daniel dude is extremely creepy
Their developing relationship is like slowly opening a Christmas present.
I love the tension that you string between your characters and the depth of your story! Good work!
I stepped in on chapter one and have been stuck ever since! Thanks
The pain of waiting for such an awesome story! I could cry! I really could!
I think you're doing a great job with the story - admittedly I like my female characters a little stronger but thats a personal choice. I don't find your editting badly done. Can't wait for more.....keep writing! :)
I hate having to wait for more. I have been loving your stories. I just wish I did not need to wait.
I am enjoying this story just as I have your previous ones.
Please continue writing and posting your stories.
I don't come to a free internet site expecting "polished" stories.
I do hope to find people with the gift of telling stories,
Thank You for sharing your gift.
Re the frequent “get an editor” comments that I keep getting on the public and private feedback; I’ve never had any luck in finding an editor, indeed it’s meant that over the years I’ve been unable to post some of my stories on LIT site.
I’m sorry that my poor editing is ruining my efforts for some of you but my philosophy has always been that if the story is good enough then the reader will overlook some of the errors, if all you are doing is looking for the mistakes; then maybe my story isn’t for you?
For all those people who are enjoying this story and have been voting and commenting – you have my heartfelt thanks.
I repeated to myself and I knew it was going to happen soon! Hehe!
Please please write more and more often :)
I love this story
but can she pleeeeease start moving past acting like a skittish little rabbit?