All Comments on 'HR Gets Fucked Up Pt. 01'

Now what is Oba going to do with little Jason? Is he calling his coworkers to completely subdue Jason?

We want, no, we NEED to know now...

You need an editor. Having to pause to determine your meaning at times subtracts from the flow of the story. Other than that, it was super hot. Can't wait for the inevitable gangbang!

I have never read a story with more grammatical errors...I liked the story...it was hot...but you really need to proof your work for errors...

If you want this series to be read;

1. You must get an editor

2. If you can’t, then learn to proofread

3. You must master the English language

4. Be realistic

a. No little ginger can deep throat a BBC, as described, for the first time ever, as

described, without coughing, puking, gagging, passing out, and just overall just

slinging snot.

b. No little ginger can take a BBC, as described, in his ass, as described, so well

without a lot more trauma unless said ginger has practiced, or been had

before.

You need some help. Seek it out. Your story could be really hot and inviting with a little help. Just letting you know. Good writing form makes a story fun to read. So does realism.

I wish it was my ginger minge boipussy getting fucked by that BBC!

I love this story, it is very hot but you really need to have an editor. I'm really looking forward to reading the next part in the story.

Can't wait for next chapter. Would like to read with more force and bondage and a gangbang or 2

Daddy taught me to love his black cock now I dress like a girl and keep him happy