by Yngwhiteboi
Daddy taught me to love his black cock now I dress like a girl and keep him happy
Can't wait for next chapter. Would like to read with more force and bondage and a gangbang or 2
I love this story, it is very hot but you really need to have an editor. I'm really looking forward to reading the next part in the story.
If you want this series to be read;
1. You must get an editor
2. If you can’t, then learn to proofread
3. You must master the English language
4. Be realistic
a. No little ginger can deep throat a BBC, as described, for the first time ever, as
described, without coughing, puking, gagging, passing out, and just overall just
slinging snot.
b. No little ginger can take a BBC, as described, in his ass, as described, so well
without a lot more trauma unless said ginger has practiced, or been had
before.
You need some help. Seek it out. Your story could be really hot and inviting with a little help. Just letting you know. Good writing form makes a story fun to read. So does realism.
I have never read a story with more grammatical errors...I liked the story...it was hot...but you really need to proof your work for errors...
You need an editor. Having to pause to determine your meaning at times subtracts from the flow of the story. Other than that, it was super hot. Can't wait for the inevitable gangbang!
Now what is Oba going to do with little Jason? Is he calling his coworkers to completely subdue Jason?
We want, no, we NEED to know now...