All Comments on 'I Fucked the Law'

There are so many details missing that makes this unreadable and it feels unfinished.

This is the first erotic story I've written and it was just for fun. Never should have posted it though. Like the Anon said: it's unfinished. But I did want to leave some things to the imagination (races, body types, locations, etc), whether that's an excuse or not is up to you (never took creative writing). If that makes it "unreadable," then there are thousands of other stories on this site for you to enjoy. Thanks. Actual constructive criticism is welcomed! [PS: There was going to be a part two, but i'm keeping it to myself now ;)]

Did he tell you why he pulled you over, did he make you dress up like a female, did you enjoy sucking his cock, did he make you a slu

Anon,

He's not really a cop! He just drives an old cop car. But, he pulled me over because he heard the music I was listening to which is popular with gay men! Yes! I put on a wig! When I did, he said I really looked liked like a girl because I had a pretty face and a fat ass too! I ABSOLUTELY LOVED sucking his dick! He came in my mouth and I SWALLOWED IT UP! He said I sucked him better than any girl he met. We exchanged numbers and I went to his crib. He fucked me SO GOOD. I stop by and see him sometimes. I AM his little slut now. It's so much better than my old life. Thinking about moving in with him; He says he has some friends who want to meet me... ;)

Okay mate this isn’t the finished article. And yes there can be improvements. But the story starts well and shows promise. So don’t let one bitter comment depress you or destroy your gift. In all probability the guy who wrote it has never written a piece of creative writing in his life so you are already one step ahead of him.

And remember the old truism. Better to have tried and failed then never to have tried at all. And you haven’t failed. But if you stop writing then he has won.

Look forward to reading part 2 and many future postings from you