All Comments on 'I Hate My Life Pt. 03'

i am getting the feeling that his mother will have to die.

how stupid this story is. The dialogue is retarded. This is some of the worst writing I have ever seen.

Grandma said nothing will happen to Marco, didn't say anything won't happen to the others.

Something will happen with the FBI agents, 1 is new and the other is 1yr from retirement and is scared to have the babysitting assignment.

What happened to the boycott of the business's?

So far I'll say a good story, my only problem with some of your stories is you have too many characters wanting the main character, then it spider webs to you having too many people that it starts to get too confusing and a bore to read.

You are a very talented writer, don't stop, just write how you wish. I'll still read your stuff.

So far, so good! One of your best efforts ever so with solid plot and character development. Looking forward to several more chapters. 5*

I said I thought it was his mother, which is pretty fucked up even in fantasy land. I'm really eager to see how you end this one, it is both different and similar to your other stories but in a good way.

I love this story, BigMadStork. Look forward to reading more. It is a shame that arseholes who write negative bullshit, prefer to remain anonymous. It is 5 stars from me, like your other stories.

I think Marco needs to sing Michael Buble's cover of the Nina Simone song "Feeling Good"...

Birds flying high

You know how I feel

Sun in the sky

You know how I feel

Breeze driftin' on by

You know how I feel

It's a new dawn

It's a new day

It's a new life

For me

And I'm feeling good

I'm feeling good

Fish in the sea

You know how I feel

River running free

You know how I feel

Blossom on a tree

You know how I feel

It's a new dawn

It's a new day

It's a new life

For me

And I'm feeling good

Dragonfly out in the sun, you know what I mean, don't you know

Butterflies all havin' fun, you know what I mean

Sleep in peace when day is done, that's what I mean

And this old world is a new world

And a bold world

For me

For me

Stars when you shine

You know how I feel

Scent of the pine

You know how I feel

Oh, freedom is mine

And I know how I feel

It's a new dawn

It's a new day

It's a new life

It's a new dawn

It's a new day

It's a new life

It's a new dawn

It's a new day

It's a new life

It's a new life

For me

And I'm feeling good

I'm feeling good

I feel so good

I feel so good

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And for the duet Michael Buble's "Haven't Met You Yet"

[Verse 1]

I'm not surprised, not everything lasts

I've broken my heart so many times, I stopped keeping track

Talk myself in, I talk myself out

I get all worked up, then I let myself down

[Pre-Chorus]

I tried so very hard not to lose it

I came up with a million excuses

I thought I'd thought of every possibility

[Chorus]

And I know some day that it’ll all turn out

You'll make me work so we can work to work it out

And I promise you, kid, that I'll give so much more than I get

I just haven't met you yet

[Verse 2]

I might have to wait, I'll never give up

I guess it's half timing and the other half's luck

Wherever you are, whenever it's right

You'll come out of nowhere and into my life

[Pre-Chorus]

And I know that we can be so amazing

And baby, your love is gonna change me

And now I can see every possibility

[Chorus]

And somehow, I know that it'll all turn out

You'll make me work so we can work to work it out

And promise you, kid, I'll give so much more than I get

I just haven't met you yet

[Bridge]

They say all’s fair in love and war

But I won’t need to fight it

We'll get it right and we'll be united

[Chorus 2]

And I know that we can be so amazing

And being in your life is gonna change me

And now I can see every single possibility

[Bridge]

And someday, I know it'll all turn out

And I'll work to work it out

Promise you, kid, I'll give more than I get

Than I get, than I get, than I get

[Chorus]

Oh, you know it'll all turn out

And you'll make me work so we can work to work it out

And promise you, kid, to give so much more than I get, yeah

I just haven't met you yet

[Outro]

I just haven't met you yet

Oh, promise you, kid, to give so much more than I get

I said love, love, love, love, love, love, love

I just haven't met you yet

Love, love, love, love, love, love, love

Yeah, I just haven't met you yet

Really enjoying the series. Its unique and keep a reader hooked.

There is room for improvement tho. Your scene changes are not very well defined and you seem to get names mixed at times.

I know they are minor issuee but a good proof reader should be bale to help.

I like what you're doing; but, you need a proofreader. You have a lot of homonyms and some outright misuse.

A very nice story. I like it. AAAAA++++