All Comments on 'I Knew What I was Doing Ch. 01'

OH MY GOD!

I could not move beyond this run on first sentence. Break your thoughts up. Give it a pause and elaborate a bit to draw a reader in.

I have mostly enjoyed sex after 'discovering' self-sex at sixteen years old, fucking just as I turned eighteen, a few times fully satisfied, most times frustrated, I have not had any long relationships, five months long is the most.

Seriously, what is this communicating beyond A.D.D. in your character.

Check for correctness. A bathroom attached to a bedroom is "en suite" At least in America it is.

The run-on sentences and rushed narrative style did this story no favours

I like the idea of the story, but oh what a rush you were in. Then the ending was all too quick when there was more that could have been told as a possible intro into another part.