All Comments on 'I Remember Mama'

There was no need to tell them was there?

I know this is fantasy time so no smart arse comments please I have always thought that there is a place and time for incest and this excellent srory is a perfect example of just that ,WELL DONE.

Aa a whole, I loved the story, it was a touching account of a relationship between a man and his mother. One thing that bothered me was the idea that a seventy year old man telling a story that happened when he was nineteen could have had access to a computer at that age. That would have had to be sometime in the fifties when that happened, and in those days nobody had computers. Perhaps nobody else noticed, but for me it sorta made me say "HUH?"

There are two sorts of computor,analogue and digital.Ever heard of Babbage?

AS far as the computer is concerned this is a fantasy story and there is no reason why the time line can't be in the future. Very well done thank you.

While I loved his story, some of the things this author wrote made no sense. Mom was 85 and he is 70. If this happened today, he would have been born in 1940.

He says the accident happened in his 19th year. That would have been 1959. He then writes that the hospital had 8 televison channels, they had 150 channels at home and he writes about his computer. There were 3 or 4 television channels back in 1959 and virtually no home computers.

As I said his story does not make sense in too many ways. I found these inconsistencies confusing and distracting.

Who gives a shit about minor details such as having so many tv channels back in the fifties. The fucking is all that matters, that's why we read these stories isn't it? Well that's why I do to see if they are as good as mine, which one day i will get round to writing, my story is fairly simple really I just as if I could fuck my mother and she said yes ,so I did often tell you one day.

Seventy years old man recalls the memories of his mother but were there computers seventy years ago?

Great story, easy 5 stars from me.

lovely story, but the kids should have been told. I would hate going to my grave and leaving something that huge from them.

Story moved way too fast, and not including the other things people were saying (about how the year made no sense considering what was said later or the minor details that weren't nessecary to the story at any point) I am morso going to focus on the actual deficiencies of the story.

Starting off with the pace, which is the main thing I disliked. A mother wouldn't just up and fuck her son or give a blowjob just like that, it's completely unrealistic as there was no conflicting emotions between the two at all. It also skipped to pregnancy very quickly, and nothing after needed to be said and should have been explored if it was a plot point in the first place. Secondly, to do with details missing that needed to be in there. Such as having a reaction to her touching his cock for the first time, or to her licking the head of his dick without warning. It was brushed off as if nothing special had happened when that was not the case at all. Thirdly, I will be talking a bit about the useless details.

"I dragged myself off to the bedroom. Turning on the computer, I was soon up on AIM. Several of my buddies were on, but I signed off before they could engage me. I shut the computer down just as mom came through the door."

This while setnence is completely irrelevant and if it is just to show that the story was in the past it s a horrible way to do it and there are many other ways for this to be done while actually including it in the story. This includes things like mentioning the lack of TV channels (hint: not a lot) and mentioning details that were specific to that time period which you should, and would, know if you'd done any research before sitting this story.

Although the overall writing isn't terrible, the composition of the story, the way It's told, the missing details, the useless details, the lack of reaction and inner thought, the fact that there is mostly dialogue and action, rather than contemplation all make this story an overall terrible read.