All Comments on 'I Was a Teenaged Metahuman Ch. 03'

Damn, that ending was well written and I'd missed the clues by being swept along the story.

wow. 5 stars don't give this story justice

[The first time I cracked up/chuckled/ laughed , lol 😂

Rhonda’s: “Three!?”] [Second: Max <—> Valerie Conversion while Max getting head] [ 3rd: Felice: catching him with her mom “I Fucking Knew it!” ]

[ 4th: Valerie “Do you think she’s mad?” ]

[ 5th: Valerie “more disgusting than swiping my vibrator? / “how did you know!?” Lol ] [ 6th: Felice “you got that inside of you?” ] [ 7th: Valerie “It would be a sin not to share him!” ] [ 8th: just reading the bold word “DOOM” 😂]

*****

About half way through the story you can see where he gets some of his powers from, I though what if he used the mind control to com pulse his mom to not use her powers on him every again...

After getting to the end (of book 1, Yay)

I like the her getting arrested better than what I originally thought. Although that could happen later. Opens up more directions the story can go... here’s a few ideas...

*****

Since the trio don’t know how long his mom is going to be locked up but probably not for long, moving away is an option and in that regard what if they went to Brunswick, where the azaleas festival is held.

And or if he’s to stay in school/town might need to change the wheels, I like old school too if keeping big bodied maybe an impala, riviera or gran furry to name a few.

In a previous chapter was Valarie’s B-day, what about making it soon to be Felice’s B-day. Have a special day for her.

Can’t think of much else...

As always love your creative spark in your stories. Looking out for book #2 and

Switched ch.5!

Amazing! Can’t wait for book 2

Sweet. Amazing. Hot. And totally freaking epic.

Nice plotting, nice characterization, nice editing and finally, nice proofreading.

Control and consent.

Dispite your warning I started here. So Im heading back to the begining. There is more than a strict religious upbringing here. Does it make me gay to enjoy what Max can and is doing with his cock. Any man wants his cock, I'm not surprised he switched back so fast.

Where could you possibly go from here

Wow.

I had to re-read that last paragraph before it sank in.

Excellent, well built up story (book). Looking forward to see where it goes from here

Sex with Mom? Probably not.

Sis? Maybe

V & F together? Why not. Maybe as 3 girls...

More girls? Eventually. He should go to college.

Maybe a bit more back story on family powers....just don’t get boring.

He should definitely get mom out of jail, but not off the hook. He needs to control her.

Crazy ideas.

Two dicks to do both at once.

Testing limits of body mod. Enhanced strength, etc.

Test limits of control with & without touching.

Yo I cant wait for the next chapter. Would it be weird if he some how found a way to bring his sister with him and/or maybe an emotional scene that accompanied it?

Dickmarks YOU WILL get book 2 out quickly!

Holy shit this was awesome! loved all 3 vhapetrs and can't wait for more. can't say however taht i'm a fan of the whole gender bending thing max does, but other than that hte story was great! Really hope he gets away from his mom and get to live a good life.

The ending was absolutely brilliant.

Keep writing your stories. The universe you have created for all of your characters is fascinating. Looking forward to what you write next.

I'm eagerly awaiting the next installment.

Really great story. My thoughts for the future; his sister has to have some of the power too. Maybe she doesn't know it. What can she do? Can Max help her find out? I suspect his grandfather has it too.

Are Max and his sister (or only Max) really the children of their father, or the result of an incestuous relationship between the grandfather and their mother? A relationship to increase the power through interbreeding, or maybe just due to lust. Then his mother's religious fanaticism resulted from her reaction to the sin of incest.

Obviously, Max and Rhonda have to flee before their mother gets out (she could be out of jail on bail in hours). Valerie could help with money and connections. They could go to Atlanta, but I think New Orleans is a better choice for the story. There, they could get involved with voodoo priests and priestesses, with lots of possibilities for the story and sexual encounters.

Just a few thoughts. Thanks for this great story.

Great world building and universe! Lots of intrigue and mystery, almost like a Neil Gaiman short story with lots of sex. Great Stuff.

p.s. Please don't do Lydia dirty! She seems to really dig mc for who he was and had no ill conceptions towards him! Please let her remain a prevalent character!

Holy shit, what an ending. Can't wait for book 2!

a story after my heart, I like everything about it, especially two things: the mother-daughter theme and the fact that Max has avoided ficking his mother and sister until now. Even though I see incest as a great fantasy for some here, it make me sick

I quite enjoyed that story.

And not just for the sexy bits, for the story. It was an excellent read.

I'm so excited that I got to share this story with you. Thanks, Literotica.

Thanks so much for your comments! I treasure them in inappropriate ways, but don't let that stop you!

What? That last part came out of nowhere.

No a fan of the gender transformation, but other than that and the wierd, unexplained parental abuse, it was good

@flynndrider Which part came out of nowhere?

@DickMarks

The last part

Thanks for the response, @flynndrider. I was planning that to be a lightly foreshadowed surprise. My hope is that the reader looks back at her scenes in the story and goes, "Ohh that makes sense." It's always good to know when something didn't work 100% as planned.

Loved it more asap.

I just came down here to say that I love the twist at the end, especially since I was wondering why (SPOILER ALERT) Max and Rhonda seemed to be following different rules despite living in different homes. Keep up the good work DickMarks

Wow!

Thank you for sharing:-)

Guess that explains his mother's reaction to his talking about Rhonda in chapter 3...

Though also have to wonder how the police managed to arrest her considering what she can do...

@Ambivalence, there's a good explanation for her allowing the arrest, and we'll see it in the next installment. It's not really a

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She has to do her thing to the police supervisor, to cancel the warrant for her arrest, or they'll just keep sending more cops.

I think the sister is a ghost, hence her still being there but also impervious to her Mom's craziness/abilities. The mother either feels shame, guilt or both and so Max gets a free pass when he wants to talk to his sister Rhonda.

Loved the slow buildup, how ingrained his religious instruction was and slow to erode. Starting to get scared that this is the last of it, but the pandemic messed up timing with a lot of things.

Where would I like it to go? Hmmm, maybe more glimpses of the outer world, but otherwise doing a great job and hopefully more to come!

There is more to come. Productivity took a hit with the pandemic but I've adjusted.

Wow, that was amazing. I can't wait for more.

I would love to learn more about variants, even if it's just exposition via a news broadcast or convo between people. They seem to be pretty rare, and possibly shunned.

The twist at the end was great, I wondered why Rhonda wasn't at the dinner table.

Did Max's stuff (keys, cellphone, etc) get left at home, it seems the mom didn't get to take her purse with her. (we know she's gonna go through his messages first chance she gets.)

I wanna learn a little more about grandpa, but I don't want it to become a whole teacher/apprentice thing, maybe just help with rent and a few hints on what else he can do besides telepathy.

Glad to see he's getting away from his mother. I hope you're going to continue this with the pink-haired girl, as well as perhaps others. This chapter was great as far as the mother-daughter bonding, but I fear that repeated sex scenes with those same people might get boring after a while. I'm bookmarking this and hoping that you can somehow find the time to continue in the not too distant future. All chapters have received 5 stars. One of the best written stories on Lit!

Thanks for the kind words!

@Timtom12 there will be more info on the world and about Variants.

@Dark_Raven I share your concerns about the repetition and have given it a lot of thought. I think you'll like what I've come up with.

5 🌟 all chapters,all literotica readers have one thing in common we turn to this so we can lose time and screw boredom,or at least that the kick for me so thanks so much for sharing your talents with us really appreciate it

Wow! You are such a fantastic writer! I hope you pick this one up again soon, it’s one of those rare stories that is a seriously engaging read even without taking the sex scenes into account (which are fantastically written in their own right).

Can’t wait to read more! You are very talented, thank you for sharing!

Oh fuck. Wow. What a powerful ending. I knew something was up but that was not what I expected!

Holy fuck. Explosive. Thank you.

Great work so far

Thanks all! I'm close to being done with chapter 05 and I hope you enjoy the read!

Holy shite. Good writing.

I kind of pegged the sister being dead when he walked into her room and it was 'dusty', this was after his mothers stilted reaction to going to speak to Rhonda. But, that ending got me a bit. I'm guessing that the Mother has powers as well, persuading him to do things and his missing time after arguing with the old woman's kids. It's a really interesting story and I've been pulled in.

Love your writing. Has a Southern flare!! Remember ALL soft drinks are Coke in the South!!!

Damn. You are actually too good. I was riding a high because of the sex and romance and then you broke my heart over the sister!

Wow would simply be an understatement. The story was amazing, and the way it was written had me gripped for hours.

Undeniably one of the best I have ever read, and not just on here.

DAMN. What a way to end the chapter. Did NOT see that coming.