All Comments on 'If You Have To... Ch. 01'

Nice. Very nice. Cant wait for next chapter.

Moving from 1st person to 3rd threw me off. Fairly well written and I can see more chapters, just double check.

Fun start! Love her focus on his cum.

Excellently written! Keep on writing.... had me hard as a rock. Hoping for a final connection in the future

Changing from 1st to 3rd person is pretty much a textbook example that this was NOT well written.

Cant wait for the next chapter 01/08/21

Looking forward to the next instalment!

Extremely boring.

I enjoyed this story. Please continue and thanks.

that sudden change of perspective there at the end was way off putting... not pleasant when you've set in a perspective style to begin with. To implement a perspective change that isn't jarring is to implement it in a way where there is a third viewer... I.E

I sat there in the car rubbing myself to the thoughts of my son cumming in my panties the night before when something changed suddenly it felt like I wasn't even there anymore. I saw myself laying there in the backseat of the car but... it didn't seem like it was me as she rubbing and fingered her pussy with her son's warm cum still soaking the fabric of her panties. She seemed so lost in her pleasure as though she were a wanton slut for something like this and I was just a bystander watching all of it even though it was me the entire time.

Please a ch 2

good story and he gets his mom pregnant

I liked the story line.

Did you realize you switched from first person to third person on the second page.

Have a great day!

T

Good story, might be worth it to jump back and clean up that switch from "I" to "she" but if it breaks your forward momentum with the ongoing chapters, then just keep writing.

5 stars and yes, I hope mom is pregnant - keep writing.

A mother and son in the wild, sharing their body heat for warmth, cuddled together, sheltered from the storm. What a lovely slippery slope into the sublime spectrum of incestuous mother fucking. Eagerly anticipating the deepening of their romance.

Fucking retard author! Can't even remember if writing in first person or third person narrative.