All Comments on 'Imperius Ch. 06'

Glad to see you back! 😊

Thanks so much. Hope you enjoyed the chapter. :)

Truly incredible writing. It's been such an honour to edit for you, you are such a gifted writer Damoiselle. I am itching to read more. I'm particularly taken with the character Saphir is turning out to be. Roll on chapter 7 (no pressure though)

Glad to see you back and safe. Hope the rest of the story goes well~~

Glad to see you back, safe and healthy. Hopefully the story works out ~ keep it going!

I love this sort of power crazed cruelty with the heroine grimly hanging onto her sanity.

Lovely powerful writing and can only hope the future chapters flow from the pen with a degree of regularity xx

I have been checking for updates to this story regularly. So happy and excited to see an update. I enjoyed the action and tension in this chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next. Thank you for writing!

I've been waiting a long time for this story. It was worth the wait.

It was honor to be able to have you edit for me! And I'm so glad you think so. Saphir has been a character who fascinates me utterly, and I'm definitely planning on giving him lots of spotlight going forward.

Good to hear from you! Thank you for your comment, and I will absolutely keep working at this. There's a lot still to come. :)

"Yay

I love this sort of power crazed cruelty with the heroine grimly hanging onto her sanity.

Lovely powerful writing and can only hope the future chapters flow from the pen with a degree of regularity xx"

Thanks so much for your comment and encouragement. And agreed, Imperius will call for tighter deadlines going forward.

"I have been checking for updates to this story regularly. So happy and excited to see an update. I enjoyed the action and tension in this chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next. Thank you for writing!"

I deeply appreciate your comment and your patience with me. Be sure to let me know if there are any things or characters you most hope to see. It doesn't necessarily change what I write in big ways, but I do find writing things I know people will particularly enjoy is extra delightful, and can help me give those things better detail.

"long wait

I've been waiting a long time for this story. It was worth the wait."

I'm glad you think so :). And I hear you, two years is too long in between chapters. I appreciate you continuing in spite of the delay.

You’re back! One of my absolute favorites such great writing so descriptive.

That Saphir development was amazing.

Can’t wait for next chapters 😊

Welcome back! Really fantastic work this chapter, I liked Saphir as a side character but now he has totally captured my attention. Seems like there's more to him than we thought, and I'm so intrigued by him and I can't wait to explore him more as well as his future interactions with Lilah after this chapter. Eris has caught my interest as well. The final page was beautifully written, and I really loved the way you slowly and deftly revealed the more cruel, controlling side of Magnus through his actions and speech. Looking forward to more! (;

Really happy you are planning to finish this. I find magnus' infatuation really exciting. Can't say I'm that bothered about the other characters though so did skim read the beginning of this chapter. I think stick to basics, and that's building the relationship between the lead characters. That's what we've tuned in for!

"Yay!

You’re back! One of my absolute favorites such great writing so descriptive.

That Saphir development was amazing.

Can’t wait for next chapters :)"

I'm glad you liked it! There's more to explore with Saphir, that I can promise. Thank you for the comment and the encouragement.

"Amazing

Welcome back! Really fantastic work this chapter, I liked Saphir as a side character but now he has totally captured my attention. Seems like there's more to him than we thought, and I'm so intrigued by him and I can't wait to explore him more as well as his future interactions with Lilah after this chapter. Eris has caught my interest as well. The final page was beautifully written, and I really loved the way you slowly and deftly revealed the more cruel, controlling side of Magnus through his actions and speech. Looking forward to more! (;"

Thank you so much for the wonderful feedback! I think you'll like the tension to come re: Lilah and Saphir, as well as the exploration of his motives and history. He's a favorite of mine as well, so I'm eager to get into that territory. :)

"So pleased

Really happy you are planning to finish this. I find magnus' infatuation really exciting. Can't say I'm that bothered about the other characters though so did skim read the beginning of this chapter. I think stick to basics, and that's building the relationship between the lead characters. That's what we've tuned in for!"

Thank you very much for the feedback. I can promise to always give a lot of attention to Magnus and Lilah. However, I think you may find there are other relationships ready to form that will appeal to you as well later on. Feel free to let me know whether I'm right. All comments are good comments.

Not Saphir! That one stung, even when you saw the betrayal coming.

Looking forward to more.

Glad you're back! Alive! Hope the 'Rona hasn't affected you too badly.

I only realized after I carefully counted: Lilah spent only 3 days Magnus' captive and about 1 day free before she got nabbed again. This story has a way of sucking you in and holding you; time moves both quickly and slowly while we're in the details, the intrigue, and the games Magnus loves playing, not to mention all the scheming going on around our two MC's. Looking forward to seeing where this goes. Maybe Lilah can trade sexual favors for Magnus' leniency regarding the state of her people. Magnus would like nothing more than her willing subjugation for their relative freedom and safety (and then he turns around and STILL enslaves them after she's completely his!).

NOOO not Saphir; I actually didn't see his betrayal coming until his fishy explanation of why and how he found Lilah with the other soldiers. Stoked to hear his backstory and see him do more kick-assery. Love it love it love it. Thanks! Hopefully now that the story is going the way you want it the chapters will flow more easily.

-Meow

"Like woah

Glad you're back! Alive! Hope the 'Rona hasn't affected you too badly.

I only realized after I carefully counted: Lilah spent only 3 days Magnus' captive and about 1 day free before she got nabbed again. This story has a way of sucking you in and holding you; time moves both quickly and slowly while we're in the details, the intrigue, and the games Magnus loves playing, not to mention all the scheming going on around our two MC's. Looking forward to seeing where this goes. Maybe Lilah can trade sexual favors for Magnus' leniency regarding the state of her people. Magnus would like nothing more than her willing subjugation for their relative freedom and safety (and then he turns around and STILL enslaves them after she's completely his!).

NOOO not Saphir; I actually didn't see his betrayal coming until his fishy explanation of why and how he found Lilah with the other soldiers. Stoked to hear his backstory and see him do more kick-assery. Love it love it love it. Thanks! Hopefully now that the story is going the way you want it the chapters will flow more easily.

-Meow"

Thank you so much for this wonderful comment!

We are of one mind regarding the sexual potential here, and Magnus' next inducement for Lilah. It's so nice when I get feedback from people who really get my villainous male lead. :)

I love how unfavorably Magnus is portrayed. It made me hate him for what he did. I couldn't stop reading, the hatred keep building. I love it.

I can't help but imagine that Lilah thinks ways to kill or sedate either Magnus or kill herself using her medical knowledge. ugh wouldn't that be perfect? Her walking in a field and seeing a poisonous or hallucinogenic plant, that none of the Imperials know about? Or knowing small ways to make herself need medical attention just long enough to devise a plan. I have this sick image of her being near fatally injured and telling him that when she dies he can finally own her body. Magnus' tumultuousness would be so satisfying. I love how we see Lilah's strength in this chapter, giving her commander a honorable death and having the massive balls to do it. I want to her to use that cunning strength again and again.

Currently in quarantine and trying to find new stories to read. When I saw this title I genuinely thought my eyes were deceiving me, so happy to see your back! It's been sooooo long, I had nearly given hope you would update. Thankfully your here and doing what u do best; releasing some incredible chapters! :D

I would live to see Illythial to strike a serious blow to Imperius in the war. They deserve some serious comeuppance with all the death and destruction Imperius have been serving. I'm especially intrigued by Eris and Saphir this chapter, they shone out to me as side characters that I am really intrigued by. Although I was disappointed in Saphir's betrayal after Lilah pleaded for his life, I do understand his reasoning and where his loyalties lie.

The way you write the erotic scenes between Magnus and Lilah is freaking volcanic! Gosh, I would reread those scenes several times from their sizzling sexual attraction to Magnus's possessive dominance and masculinity. I do think the relationship will have to get worse before it will get better. I can't see how Lilah can view Magnus other than her captor at the minute, I'm curious how you will write the dynamics of their budding relationship in the future chapters. I do secretly hope we will get to see Magnus madly jealous as well, especially regarding her previous fiance.

Keep up the amazing work, please don't make us wait too long for the next chapter! Xx

"there's so much to talk about

I love how unfavorably Magnus is portrayed. It made me hate him for what he did. I couldn't stop reading, the hatred keep building. I love it.

I can't help but imagine that Lilah thinks ways to kill or sedate either Magnus or kill herself using her medical knowledge. ugh wouldn't that be perfect? Her walking in a field and seeing a poisonous or hallucinogenic plant, that none of the Imperials know about? Or knowing small ways to make herself need medical attention just long enough to devise a plan. I have this sick image of her being near fatally injured and telling him that when she dies he can finally own her body. Magnus' tumultuousness would be so satisfying. I love how we see Lilah's strength in this chapter, giving her commander a honorable death and having the massive balls to do it. I want to her to use that cunning strength again and again."

Thank you for this great feedback. It's so encouraging--and a bit inspiring--to read. I can definitely say that I don't even imagine Lilah losing that courage. I hope you continue to enjoy the story!

"Yayyy your back!

Currently in quarantine and trying to find new stories to read. When I saw this title I genuinely thought my eyes were deceiving me, so happy to see your back! It's been sooooo long, I had nearly given hope you would update. Thankfully your here and doing what u do best; releasing some incredible chapters! :D

I would live to see Illythial to strike a serious blow to Imperius in the war. They deserve some serious comeuppance with all the death and destruction Imperius have been serving. I'm especially intrigued by Eris and Saphir this chapter, they shone out to me as side characters that I am really intrigued by. Although I was disappointed in Saphir's betrayal after Lilah pleaded for his life, I do understand his reasoning and where his loyalties lie.

The way you write the erotic scenes between Magnus and Lilah is freaking volcanic! Gosh, I would reread those scenes several times from their sizzling sexual attraction to Magnus's possessive dominance and masculinity. I do think the relationship will have to get worse before it will get better. I can't see how Lilah can view Magnus other than her captor at the minute, I'm curious how you will write the dynamics of their budding relationship in the future chapters. I do secretly hope we will get to see Magnus madly jealous as well, especially regarding her previous fiance.

Keep up the amazing work, please don't make us wait too long for the next chapter! Xx"

Thank you for your lovely comment. It means so much to me that you like the story and share your thoughts about it with me.

The good news, is that this was probably the part that the was the most technically difficult for me to write. The next chapter is, thus far, shaping up to be something on a smaller scale...and a more intimate one. I really hope you like it. :)

So glad you’ve continued this story; it’s quite intriguing. After I saw it, I went back and read all the previous chapters before continuing on to this one. I have to say that I love your character development, but I thought that her shooting her commander was disingenuous. She’s a medic, and up until this point found no greater purpose than saving lives... and then she took one of her own volition... out of nowhere... and didn’t say boo about it. That makes no sense. She saved the enemy’s life (her tormentor), and more ppl died and were enslaved. Wouldn’t it make sense if she had aimed the gun at herself in order to get the ppl with her free? Then, he could either call her bluff or let them go. Either way, he’d still be just as angry. It just doesn’t make sense that someone who respects life that much turns around and kills someone seemingly without remorse. She should be a mess. Swimming in guilt. She should think she deserves the punishment, though not for the same reasons as given. She should hate him for making her kill someone at the very least. She should have screamed it into his face. “I wish I had let you die!” She’s too lucid in that moment. Calculating her next move, trying to give answers he wants to hear and just giving up. Still, your story is amazing, and I love it. The sexual tension is amazing!

Welcome back!!!! I love this story and am so glad you finally updated it. Very interesting development and I really hope that Eris survived.

Please please don't make Lilah lose hope and succumb to him. Please don't make her fall for him just because he's "all powerful". Please don't make her into another "I am addicted to his touch. Oh no, my core is melting..." cliche. Lilah should have an inner strength that surprises him and even herself.

I wish that she can continue to fight him defiantly, so that he learns...that it's an absolute honor to have her give herself to him willingly, that despite all these mental games he's played and physical dominance he's shown, that she never truly yielded. Oh how glorious it would be if his confidence was to shatter utterly and completely, once he realises that she has more control over him than he ever dreamt possible. I want to see him mad, furious and completely loosing it until she scoops him up from the depth of his despair. Muahahahaha.

Guess I'm just a hopeless romantic huh? Thanks for the story by the way. Please continue.

Glad to see you are back!

Saphir ... Woah, uhhh, wasn't expecting that from him ... Definitely interested in hearing more about his backstory. How he met Magnus, and what his agenda is.

OK, I have a couple of questions about character details:

1. Is Eris Dracian? If so, how did she end up on the Illythian side?

2. Is the Imperial family Dracian (like Ariadne)? I had assumed so at first, but now I'm not so sure.

3. The question of who tried to set Magnus up on the battlefield still remains. Are you going to circle back to answer it anytime soon? (Cato is too obvious, right?)

"Welcome back

So glad you’ve continued this story; it’s quite intriguing. After I saw it, I went back and read all the previous chapters before continuing on to this one. I have to say that I love your character development, but I thought that her shooting her commander was disingenuous. She’s a medic, and up until this point found no greater purpose than saving lives... and then she took one of her own volition... out of nowhere... and didn’t say boo about it. That makes no sense. She saved the enemy’s life (her tormentor), and more ppl died and were enslaved. Wouldn’t it make sense if she had aimed the gun at herself in order to get the ppl with her free? Then, he could either call her bluff or let them go. Either way, he’d still be just as angry. It just doesn’t make sense that someone who respects life that much turns around and kills someone seemingly without remorse. She should be a mess. Swimming in guilt. She should think she deserves the punishment, though not for the same reasons as given. She should hate him for making her kill someone at the very least. She should have screamed it into his face. “I wish I had let you die!” She’s too lucid in that moment. Calculating her next move, trying to give answers he wants to hear and just giving up. Still, your story is amazing, and I love it. The sexual tension is amazing!"

Thanks for your feedback!

That's a really good point. It *is* suspiciously out of character for Lilah to suddenly be willing to kill someone, especially someone on her own side. It definitely raises some questions.

When it comes to your second point, though...While I can understand your frustration with Lilah's ostensible passivity (I did write Elspeth to give voice to similar sentiments, after all), that aspect of her is very much in character.

"Welcome back!!!! I love this story and am so glad you finally updated it. Very interesting development and I really hope that Eris survived.

Please please don't make Lilah lose hope and succumb to him. Please don't make her fall for him just because he's "all powerful". Please don't make her into another "I am addicted to his touch. Oh no, my core is melting..." cliche. Lilah should have an inner strength that surprises him and even herself.

I wish that she can continue to fight him defiantly, so that he learns...that it's an absolute honor to have her give herself to him willingly, that despite all these mental games he's played and physical dominance he's shown, that she never truly yielded. Oh how glorious it would be if his confidence was to shatter utterly and completely, once he realises that she has more control over him than he ever dreamt possible. I want to see him mad, furious and completely loosing it until she scoops him up from the depth of his despair. Muahahahaha.

Guess I'm just a hopeless romantic huh? Thanks for the story by the way. Please continue."

Thank you for your comment, and for your detailed reactions and hopes. It helps me so much to read other people's takes on the characters, and I believe I can safely pledge that Lilah's internal sense of self is much further from fraying away than even Lilah might realize. :)

"Glad to see you are back!

Saphir ... Woah, uhhh, wasn't expecting that from him ... Definitely interested in hearing more about his backstory. How he met Magnus, and what his agenda is.

OK, I have a couple of questions about character details:

1. Is Eris Dracian? If so, how did she end up on the Illythian side?

2. Is the Imperial family Dracian (like Ariadne)? I had assumed so at first, but now I'm not so sure.

3. The question of who tried to set Magnus up on the battlefield still remains. Are you going to circle back to answer it anytime soon? (Cato is too obvious, right?)"

I live for your pedantic question!

1. Eris *is* Dracian. We'll get more into the details in the story, but briefly, she's a runaway slave, one that's physically powerful enough to actually get to another country and do whatever she can to oppose the Imperius.

2. The Imperial family is dominantly Dracian, but they have a tendency to marry people from other cultures, often, but not exclusively, as a diplomatic strategy.

As such, Ariadne is half-Dracian.

More on that later. :)

3. The question of who tried to set Magnus up is a topic that will resurface soon, but is a ways off from being resolved. Rest assured that I do know who's behind it (I'm not pulling a J.J. Abrams on you).

As for Cato being too obvious, I think that's a savvy take. ;)

Thank you for answering my questions! I’m excited to learn more about Eris backstory! I wonder then if she knows some of the people on the Imperial side from her early days as a slave.

My other question/comment then is that the text isn’t clear about what happens between Elspeth and Saphir. Are readers to understand that Elspeth frees Saphir (and steals Boyne’s weapon) in order to interrogate him? And then Saphir overpowers her and doubles back to attack the Illythian camp? Or does Saphir free himself? In that case, where is Elspeth? In a fire fight with the enemy, I don’t see her sitting on the sidelines.

I've been meaning to comment on this for some time. After finding this story (5* by the way, obviously), the dynamic between the two leads has definitely surfaced in my mind more than once, especially the last hawt scene. You've balanced the villain extremely well; he isn't crudely brutal, he's very powerful, sure of himself, physically appealing, and yet absolutely terrifying. He's spicy hot but I'm scared of him haha. Great job.

"Thank you for answering my questions! I’m excited to learn more about Eris backstory! I wonder then if she knows some of the people on the Imperial side from her early days as a slave.

My other question/comment then is that the text isn’t clear about what happens between Elspeth and Saphir. Are readers to understand that Elspeth frees Saphir (and steals Boyne’s weapon) in order to interrogate him? And then Saphir overpowers her and doubles back to attack the Illythian camp? Or does Saphir free himself? In that case, where is Elspeth? In a fire fight with the enemy, I don’t see her sitting on the sidelines."

This one I left vague deliberately, and will be discussed more as the story continues, but I suppose it doesn't hurt to say here that Saphir freed himself.

Though Elspeth did inadvertently make it easier for him.

"I've been meaning to comment on this for some time. After finding this story (5* by the way, obviously), the dynamic between the two leads has definitely surfaced in my mind more than once, especially the last hawt scene. You've balanced the villain extremely well; he isn't crudely brutal, he's very powerful, sure of himself, physically appealing, and yet absolutely terrifying. He's spicy hot but I'm scared of him haha. Great job."

Thanks for the comment! (and the 5*) Writing Magnus is my biggest challenge, and we can thank my partner for making a lot of his dialogue hit harder. I'm delighted that he resonates with you. :D

Love it and am really looking forward to reading more this will be a favorite. I enjoy the fact that after her recapture he is cold, harsh and forcing her to see things his way. Less gentle now .

I was so excited to see another chapter! Thank you for continuing!

With my rose colored glasses on I'll just say that this reminds me of those shifter stories about fated mates where the aggressive/possessive werewolf male claims his human mate then needs to convince her that they're destined to be together.

I loved the scene where Lilah willingly gives herself to Magnus in an attempt to save her friend. I feel like in that moment Magnus would've given her the world had she asked for it. He may be a controlling and possessive ass but he's very much her controlling and possessive ass.

I also see him purchasing her friends to make her happy and also as a way to keep her in line. She won't risk her friends' safety and since she gave herself to him I think he'll do anything to get her to be 'willing' again. It was like the best high for him.

I can't wait to find out more about Saphir and Daegon. I wonder how they really feel about her and if there would be any point that they would step between Magnus and Lilah.

Thanks again for continuing! Can't wait for the next installment!

I'm soooo happy you decided to continue with this series! Please take your time writing this magnificent series but also please don't abandon it again? (Hehe) I really love this series and is one of the best stories here on wattpad <3

Honestly, everything I have to say is pretty much covered in the title of this comment.

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btw, five ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ stars

I would like to see a scene of what happens to Magnus when he finds out that Lilah ran. Instead of just a bunch of erotic scenes, I would like to see a relationship building. Did he go a little crazy? Did he send Saphir after her? It might help the reader sympathize with Magnus - if, in fact, that is what you want. I am interested to see if there actually is a happily ever after or will he destroy her spirit and himself in the process.

Also added comment - please take it or leave it. You have a lot of characters and it's hard to keep them straight. Would it benefit the story to merge some characters and overall, simplify them?

Great story, I'm enjoying it a lot and hope you continue posting.

Really enjoying this story... bit of an homage to The Rebellious Slave, it seems, with similar great adventure building (though Lilah is much more soft and submissive and much more affected by any touch from Magnus, in a quite magical way, compared to Kara in TRS, like in this chapter as well.... does he even touch her clit...? hmm... she comes three times.... it could be these nations are not really in fully human bodies... could be one explanation....) it's nice to see Lilah show with Magnus some of her practicality and that strength that came out when she for instance jumped to fight Elspeth in the ring... as she often comes across nearly drugged in her responses to him... she's so soft and malleable straight away... in this chapter she was a bit more clear-headed and strong.... which makes sense.... she shot/tried to shoot her military leader as a last act before being captured... it makes sense for her to not be all hearts and fluffiness in reaction to Magnus's touch right after.

Like the commenter before me, I would also like to see, and was expecting, a scene that showed Magnus's reaction to him realising Lilah was gone..... how angry and 'missing her' was he, when he couldn't get to her straight away...? What were his thoughts and actions...? etc. would be great to see this, maybe you could add it.

In terms of the Illythian regiment Eris and Lilah ran to... they looked to have no military experience, training or understanding, and no effective leadership.... or even common sense.... no one in their right mind would have taken Saphir with them... he could have easily swallowed a tracking device, and his story about following Lilah to see if she was okay was completely ridiculous, and clearly he was still loyal to Magnus.... and when they started drugging each other.... jesus :) they pretty much deserved to get caught :).... also, they spent about 20 minutes or more chit-chatting at standstill about this and that with no urgency, after Eris and Lilah joined them ... when it seemed they should have been hastily on the move.... (maybe there's some room for further drafts on these types of scenes... action scenes can be difficult to write for sure, but you're doing well...).

It was great to see Lilah make her escape, like Kara did in TRS..... it was just a shame that it was such a short-lived one before her being captured again..... maybe there will be another one...... it would have been nice if Lilah had a bit of a romantic moment with someone she used to know whilst on the run as well (not sex, but maybe smth little).... as Magnus's jealousy might look quite interesting :) judging by the intensity of his reactions to her.... that would be yummy.

I really liked that Lilah made the point about "my body is preparing itself" when being confronted about her wetness. i get a little tired of this being such a MAJOR thing in stories, that the girl is being made to feel ashamed about this for some reason and then has a near identity crisis about it.... when the body just prepares itself as a safety mechanism for a possible (possibly painful) penetration. and sometimes the body lubricates when it's being played with, that's also just a mechanical reaction that's normal. Nice to see you write that line in.

Anyway, this is a great story..... really loving reading it...

(oh, an aside: do people still call a vagina 'quim'...? maybe it's an older word... )

Thanks for writing, will read more. xxx