All Comments on 'In Over her Head'

Lacking too much in the set up. A few short paragraphs could have added much. Was she also roofied or did alcohol alone cause so much inhabition? Some small amount of real resistance would have been nice. Her transition from supposed investigator to busom heaving sex animal suffered from a bit of magical cock syndrome. No mention at all as to where Mr Arargi got off to? Seems an intentional set up on his part. Finally, you acknowledge this is at least dub-con in your tags. Anything short of full consent ought to post in noncon/reluctance. This has a solid foundation, but needs more development.

You are absolutely right about the lack of setup. This was a commission for a person who wanted me to continue a story he started. I thought it stood well enough on its own, but perhaps a bit of setup could have benefitted the overall narrative.