All Comments on 'In the Mountains'

First let me encourage the author who first wrote 10 years ago. It take bravery to post here.

I believe in fair balance criticism as that is the only way to help authors improve.

The historic setting was well done.

The story was simple ad brief.

I felt is was rushed and needed more than double the words.

Possible, but unlikely that they had no children.

Compared to so many great Romances on this site, I feel generous in giving a 3 after toying with a 2.

Way too short. The story had much potential, a shame to waste it with such a rushed ending.

The build up and scene setting was good but the sex poor, which is pity as the story had good potential. It was almost as if you'd set yourself a word limit and needed to fit in an ending. I'd also suggest you run your story through a programme such as Grammarly, as you have typos here and there. I could only give you three stars but with a rewrite it has the potential for five.