All Comments on 'In Which an Elven Servant... Ch. 13'

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I'm enjoying the story and I like the writing style and quality. If I was rating you as a writer you'd definitely be in my top 5%. Of course that means I notice much smaller errors (the price of your superior writing skills :)

This is just some "post editing" input: Search on these:

-->anging<--

->satisfied grown<--

-->reflex, I<--

The last is just my being picky, but I'd prefer that without a comma. :)

I'm getting a little irritated by this authors style of writing. I mean seriously just get to the point! What is this guy's deal? An elf and a succubus and he decides to play mind games? And denial? It's just weird. Seems like the author started a story and hasn't decided the ending.. just playing it by ear.

Look, even for fantasy, this is nuts. Guy has a perfectly willing lovely elf and literally and figuratively horny succubus wet, ready, and willing. To deny all this for so long....WTF. Ok, the guy has willpower, he's a rock. This ain't the sexual equivalent of LOST where we just get teased for years.

I can't help but feel that the commentors are missing the point of this story.

It's a tease and denial fic. It's about teasing and denial. It is not about lots and lots of sex.

There are lots of stories with lots and lots of sex. I'm sick of them. "Don't ever satisfy the horny girls" is way, way more interesting to me.

I see a number of posts complaining about the denial theme in this series. I'd like to counter them by saying that I love the denial theme, and your writing is super fucking hot.

There seems to be a few uptight people reading this series.

Take a step back, not only is it tease and denial but the vast majority is satire with a damned good amount of erotic thrown in.

Like most of the other readers I’m cheering for Loreli to fully serve her master.