by fantac64
I'm trying to figure out how not one, but two women managed to eat each other out through gags, and respond to verbal commands when their masks were designed to prevent them from hearing what was going on around them. Blatant mistakes like these are what make potentially interesting stories and make them just plain dumb.
Yeah, bit of a continuity problem but the underlying story was good (well, I enjoyed it). Plenty of material here for another couple of chapters.
... I'm just against it if BOTH partners don't know that it's incest.
This could have been really hot - the game as a story line has lots of potential. However, the whole time I was reading it, I was completely distracted by the issues with the gags and masks that have already been mentioned. It's too bad that they spoiled what could have been a great story.
I agree that I had a slight problem with the idea of a gagged person giving oral sex to another, but I think the harshness of some of the commentary here borders on being unpleasant. Anyway, good story, fantac64. This one could use a rewrite, but has definitely the basics of one of your delightful stories!
She was gagged and blindfolded so she couldn't hear? But she could lick pussy? Huh? And getting the mother involved unwillingly was unbelievable, as was parading her through a football stadium with an audience. All nonsense.
Seriously. In the first few paragraphs. Major item to overlook.
Loved the way that you melded the incest into your short story. And still left yourself a continuation if you so desired.
5🌟's