by Zorroscamp
A well written and very loving story. I enjoied it very much
While extremely well written, the author makes the daughter seem hapless. She feels and realizes all the warning signs of an upcoming inappropriate relationship but walks headlong into it. Wheather daddy is sleeping or not, a hand on a tit, is a hand on a tit. It is not a snake hynotized by a mongoose. So, all the melodrama the author attempts to show her going through, as the progression of Daddy's increasing lust for her escalates, became boring. Good writing, Poor Story Line!
Loved it. Please consider writing one about a younger daughter - perhaps teenaged? I'm becoming a big fan of your work.
I had my daughter when she was a bit younger and still do quite regular.
I fucking love your grammar, the way you spoke and described every word. Oh my fucking god that was wonderful.