All Comments on 'Incubus Pupa Ch. 13'

This ending didn’t sit right. His whole vitae addiction thing just came out of left field, and was squashed just as fast considering it turned him into a cliche douche. All of this doesn’t even touch on why Ella just up and decides to fae bond, when the story seemed to be setting it up as a slow burn. Not to mention why the same person that casually erases Ia’s mind concedes so easily to Ella. With how much happened in this chapter, it could have fit in its own book, and at least should have been put into a few more chapters. This was the same feeling I got reading paradise found, as if you had just squashed the second half of your story into the very end.

Not a fan of so many redundant sex scenes, it felt as if the plot was an afterthought in this chapter. This is Literotica though so you do you.

On a brighter note I look forward to how you explore a harem that don’t automatically dote on each other. While the POV scene was ultimately a miss, it was a fun experiment I’ve never seen before. It would probably be more seamless if you didn’t mesh the pronouns, and emphasise Adam experiencing the new bodies he inhabited.

Regards, SrD

Thank you! Happy to see you're continuing the story.

Soooo... THAT WAS TOTALLY WICKED! When do we get the next installment? I want to hear ALL ABOUT his romance with Ells!!!!!!!! (Thank you for the amazing story!)

Woo-hoo! It's here!

I thing having him lose himself to his Fae was a decent way to get Ella to join and tie everything together. I like how Ella keeps Adam grounded. She prevents him from losing himself, and in return, she gets his love and devotion as well as a number of 'bond-sisters' to (probably, hopefully?) get close with.

From your descriptions, it sounds like Sandy's new breasts and Ia's new hips/thighs are a bit TOO big. Ella mentioned that these changes would (likely) be temporary, and I think that's the best way to go. They had significant assets before and a change of is magnitude seems like a bit too much. Same thing I guess with the lactation. It makes sense for it to happen given the nature of what was going on, but I feel like having them all lactate constantly would 'dilute' it's eroticism, compared to one of them asking him to give that trait to her because she felt like it resonated with her (or something like that). Just my thoughts, I like big tits, but there is such a thing as too big (and it sounds like they found it).

I enjoy how the story maintains itself as a 'Slice of Life' where it's the 'Characters vs Life & Growing Up', rather than having some grand overblown 'Adam vs The Demon Lord/etc.' where outside factors constantly try and trash Adam's happy life.

I'm already looking forward to chapter 14. Keep writing and I'll keep reading!

This is wow. I like The plot, the meeting between Adam and Ella. Makes sense,just hoping you won't take long to post the next chapters

Its a good chapter. I think Ells need to become the queen fairly quickly just to keep Adam centered as he became a junky fairly fast there. I would like to see the morning after as I got a feeling that no one would be able to go go to school given everything that happened. Also I think Adam needs to me Ells' real mother.

More please

I was concerned that this series would be ruined as the Fae subsumed Adam. Ella coming over to rescue her bond mate was a satisfying start to a continuation of the harem life. I am interested to see if there is ongoing fallout from the nine local women. Is the feisty woman actually a fit for Ia's company? Is there more to Erin and her vitae? In other harem stories, Sandy's mom, Adam's mom, Amy, teachers or a dryad grove surrounding Ella might have been folded in already. I enjoy the slice of life approach you are using and love getting to know the characters. I enjoyed Sandy and Adam in the park or Adam and Christine learning more about each other. Eroticism is fun but romance and character development improve the series. The feedback loop between Adam and each of his bond mates is exciting. How will each of them grow and develop? How does Ella cope with and/or facilitate all of these bonds? Thank you for sharing your stories and look forward to more!

I am so glad that this is continuing, I was afraid that perhaps you were no longer writing. I love your stories and I cannot wait for more of this story.

I am so glad Ella was there to pull his head out of his ass. I instantly hated that character development. Bravo! Fantastic story thus far!

..Just can't wait for more!! At first I was treating this story as fap material but now..

This story is awesome! I hope you keep it up! Can't wait for more.

I bloody loved this story and I am eagerly looking forward to reading much more in future episodes. I need to find out how his relationship with Ella developes.

You were jumping the Shark when Captain Quint and The Orca came outta nowhere.

Great stuff, many thanks for your efforts. More please ....

Wonderful series. I am truly looking forward to more!!!

Great series. Hoping it will continue.

Great story. I hope you find the time to continue it. I suspect that what happened in this chapter may not be normal for an incubus and Adam will turn out to be some kind of super incubus. I'm not sure I support that because it is such a cliche in these kind of stories, unless you can give it an unusual twist. But I'm sure I'll read whatever you write.

Once again, you spin a wonderful and thought provoking tale. Its not often i find a Fae story that I like. At least from the ones I've found, many don't see the potential there, or they just toss out source material and adlib. The way you took the Dryad's bonding with a Tree, as an example; and spun it as a misunderstanding was rather interesting. I eagerly await where you take your stories next!

Hey man hope you continue the story looking forward to more if you are can’t wait hopefully you update us and keep us informed of what’s happening and hopefully you make more thanks man keep up the good work

What an incredible Story. Very well written. The bonding and Queen thing kind of reminds me of "three Square Meals", another story here on the Platform. Did you get your Inspiration there or somewhere else entirely? Doesn't really matter, but it just came to my mind while reading your story and since that is another one of my favorites...

Another author bites the dust. Oh well.

More please…..

5/5

Please continue. It's been over 2 years..,

Ah, here's that inevitable lesbian scene I knew was coming. No author can resist it for long especially in a longer series. :)

Then we kick it up a notch and it becomes a full-blown orgy wherein the MC seems to have lost himself and become a sex-crazed asshole with no morals. Gotta say I was not a fan of that. But it seems Ella comes in to save the day and restore her old friend and bond with him. Looks like it was setting up her position as queen. Sadly we didn't see a consummation yet and by the looks of things this is where the story ends (although clearly there is more to be written) since the author last wrote it 2 years ago. Well that's a shame. So annoying when a series is left unfinished.

Encore! Encore! ,over this series, a great take on the incubus genre.

Please continue the story ASAP. If you have a patreon or discord account please put it in your bio.

Come on now, it’s been over two years since your last chapter. Get your arse into gear and finish this amazing story. There’s so much more to be told.⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️