All Comments on 'Indecent Connections Version 02 Ch. 01'

better than the original, you've grown as an author

Much better than the original. Very impressive.

5/5

Excellent story, but the grammatical errors are very off-putting. I appreciate your effort, but you really need an editor to proofread your work. 4/5

I like the premise a lot. I can see how this will develop into a very arousing story line. The editing or even just proof reading is something that is lacking and is distracting.