All Comments on 'Internal Affairs Pt. 01'

I so hope caroline becomes an obedient pet

the most amazing role 1 could have :)

anxiously awaiting the seduction

les_carrie@yahoo.com

The chapter is quite well-written but is marred by a couple of little (apparent) errors. In one paragraph, Caroline left the room [and] "...Emma had a clear view of Emma's seat..." Caroline is finalising the itinerary for Emma's trip to Mumbai and then we find out she's going to Singapore. Are these the same trips or separate ones? There's quite a difference between Mumbai and Singapore (needs clarifying).

I love the way you built the readers up to her orgasm. The only fault I can find is that you are making us wait until you publish the next part.

XoxoX SWx

You initially mention a trip to Mumbai but in later paragraphs, you have written Singapore. Different places...